I enjoyed it. Nice work. I could say more, but my criticism is rarely intellingent, much less constructive, so I won't bore you. YOu probably won't see this anyway. Oh well.
I love it how in the begginning, you think that it's actually happening,and then it turns out to be the knght telling a story. I also love the line at the end, heh heh. That's quotable.
This is a very entertaining story, Searria, and you and your sister's commentary is, too. Nice work on this. Hope to see you around YWS when you get your own account!!!
"I myself am composed entirely of flaws, stitched together with good intentions."- Augusten Burroughs
May you never steal, lie, or cheat. But if you must steal, then steal away my sorrows. And if you must lie, then lie with me all the nights of your life. And if you must cheat, then please, cheat death. — An Unknown Bride, Leap Year
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