Title: Eventide
Genre: Fantasy
Synopsis: Natura Halle has always done what she can for her family, especially in the face of her father's failing health. So when a man she has only met once comes to her small village to ask for her hand in marriage, her father eagerly agrees and Natura has to accept. Only, her new husband's intentions are not what they seem, and Natura is whisked away on a shot-in-the-dark journey across Ascensia under the guidance of two strange foreign women.
What I have here is probably the first half-ish of the novel, coming in at around 59,000 words. Be warned, some of the words are awkward and some of the writing isn't the best, but the plot is pretty much stable at this point (in general, at least). What I'd appreciate the most feedback on is plot things, holes and stuff that doesn't make sense.
Oh, and also, if you run into a name in all caps like SURNAME or NAME or something similar, those are names I haven't figured out yet (I'm not good at names, okay?). So disregard them xD
*removed, cause revision*
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