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Tue Dec 30, 2008 3:39 am
beemarie425 says...



It says that the extension doc. is not allowed? What does this mean?



Hello All!

This is my first time posting in the Advanced Critiques section, so be kind!

This is my first attempt at a "novel" as well, so do not be kind when critiquing it!

First of all, please note any plot holes or un-flowing elements within, sometimes I mention or allude to things then never clear them up in a sufficient amount of time,

Also, characterization, for example-can you identify with Remy-or even Tasker? Let me know!

Finally, check my grammar, especially comma placement within dialogue, that kills me!

Thanks alot!!

BeeMarie
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Tue Dec 30, 2008 10:11 am
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niccy_v says...



Er, I suggest you refresh, then try again. Check you do not have the doc open as you upload. Sorry I'm not a computer whizz.

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