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Children of Dread - Blood Oath



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Tue Jan 26, 2016 3:11 am
EmmVeePi says...



Book one of my fantasy/mythological epic. I am still open to possibly making it part one of a single book but for the time being it is a stand alone book. It stands at 40,500 words right now. I will go ahead and rate this 16+ for some violence and suggestion of sexuality(nothing explicit).

The story starts out following two princes who get swept out to sea during a storm and meet two strangers on an island. Later they return to their kingdom and one is made king. After that a mysterious wander arrives and things will never be the same in the kingdom.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1e-fYfBSHP_YbgAoUvjcdEQ7XThLIAfVXDEb9Ll4wM9E/edit?usp=sharing

Looking for "big picture" editing. I am not that concerned with specific grammar and punctuation right now(however if there is a rule I am repeatedly breaking or a major weakness on the technical side feel free to inform me). Story arc, character development, pacing, concept, these are the things I am interested in getting feedback on.
  








I always knew that deep down in every human heart, there is mercy and generosity. No one is born hating another person because of the color of his skin, or his background, or his religion. People must learn to hate, and if they can learn to hate, they can be taught to love, for love comes more naturally to the human heart than its opposite.
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