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rosey unicorn wrote:Now, this situation wouldn't work as a historical fiction at all.
I haven't heard of any empires in that area with walls around the whole kingdom (too hard to maintain. The only example I know of is in China, that that wall took four-hundred years to build and the guy who ordered it to be built was slightly crazy) That little bit of information might really mess up your world building, but should you put in some sort of magic to make the wall's maintenance easier, (going back to the Great Wall, it was abandoned soon after completion) as well as building, then it is plausible.
You'd also have to take culture into account here. A place like Egypt would be more modern in thinking (they had such a thing as woman's rights) but if you go in the Middle East there will be much more suppressing of women. All of those countries were slave holding nations, so you're safe on that front. However, they would be treated differently.
.When it comes to the actual plot, I think make the girl resistant to magic but hide it (why else would she be chosen as a sacrifice?) but have her be shipped off. There is a lot more room for plot that way
I'd be slightly careful on the king's personality there. He's got to have some redeeming qualities.
The captured sister thing could be used well, with a twist. You'd have to put one in though because I've seen that done a lot.
Would it still be able to take place in the desert? And use some of their customs?
Well, if it's fantasy, it probably would be... But I need to double check -.-"
I was thinking about Avatar (the last airbender) when I was thinking about this. They have bending skills, therefore, it was a lot easier for them. I'd give the other people magic, but then, it wouldn't make the charmers as special.
Unless... This kingdom/village/empire *does not know terms* was built in a valley, or some sort of natural rock formation that could somehow box it up. Maybe I should watch Aladdin again @__@
But that reminds me... Genies? Sorceresses? Magic?
Aladdin was in a place similar to Arabia? Actually, I don't know where it took place.
I feel like merging cultures. But I'll wait for you to reply to see if that's allowed, first.
*awaits Rosey's all-knowingness*
Wait, so after she's shipped of she's gone from the book forever? O__O Can you explain this to me, Rosey?
And also, wherever the setting is, most of the woman or people in general wore shemaghs, or some sort of garment that protects their neck and face from the sun.
and also because her family is safe because she's sacrificing herself instead.
She used a different name to protect her identity or something. Haven't decided.
But something like that will prevent the "boy being fascinated by girl" thing from being cliche. They don't fall in love, they're related. And the whole time they were put into slavery because they thought doing so would keep the other from being a slave.
Or maybe they hear from a fortune teller (gypsy? did they exist there?)
Haven't decided the ending. But they'll probably try to escape. Or maybe they hear from a fortune teller (gypsy? did they exist there?) that the valley the kingdom is in will flood and they try to rescue the empire? Does it work? Probably not. Or they just try to escape.
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