So, wondering if the first story I came up with is even worth perusing, since it's been four years and I still haven't worked out all the kinks in the plot.
The plot is:
My MC got dragged along to the capital for her sister's (no idea if it's older of younger yet) marriage to the Crown Prince in a land plagued by drought. The MC has a rare breed of magic that allows her to sense emotions around her, including Nature's. When she gets to the capital, which isn't drought plagued, and realizes things aren't what they seem. Well, the Emperor (the villain) notices this, and the effect she has on the people around her, he sends her and the Crown Prince (and guards, of course) to a rebel country where the Elementals live to try to have the Elementals bring the rain back. Once inside the country they get the full story, and that is the Emperor has been capturing Elementals to force the country to be completely dependent on Imperial stocks, and that the Crown Prince has a weaker version of the MC's magic. They spend six months in this 'rebel' country to learn the depths of their magic, and when they get back is where my plot goes fuzzy. Either they (the MC and the Crown Prince) square off against the villain who then vanishes, or the Emperor (and the Crown Prince's brother) have already vanished when they get there. The MC's sister is either already gone because she got into hot water, or she was unwillingly taken with the villains. The drought might end at this point if the MC frees some (or all) of the Elementals the villain has captured.
The next event (after a bunch of repercussion from the Emperor vanishing and the MC being allowed to do stuff normally reserved for men) is she manages to find the villains in another city, where the jewel that represents the MC's bloodline is being kept (the MC gets invited to a cousin's wedding in that city). She goes there with some help, and here is where things get fuzzy, again. She either: goes to the city alone, squares of against the villain, looses, but he doesn't kill her for reasons you'll find out later; goes to the city with help, but still squares off against the villain alone, see looses note above; or faces him with help and he vanishes when the odds are out of his favour (the third option is my least favourite because of a sub-plot that throws a twist into things). When she gets back there might be a court case to dismiss her sister (depends where the sister is in all of this, she's a new character) and then it's a mad hunt to find the villains before he cracks the code for the bloodline's jewel. The drought might end at this point if she frees some (or all) of the Elementals the villain has captured.
The ending, well, that's when she finally defeats the villain. The drought would have to end here.
A few questions about the main plot I'd like for people to answer:
1- Would you read this?
2- Do you see any little annoying things here that are unrealistic and/or cliched?
3- Which of the plot points that are fuzzy do you like the best/think are the most realistic?
4- Where would be a nice place for the drought to end?
I am really, really confused at this point and would like a few more opinions on this.
Thank you!
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