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Thu Sep 04, 2014 8:49 pm
NicoleBri says...



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Sat Sep 06, 2014 1:43 am
TigersMoon says...



It seems pretty cliche. If you can add a more interesting subplot or setting, it might become better. I really can't tell just based on this.
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Sun Sep 07, 2014 1:08 pm
mitzeee says...



Yeah, this is very cliche. I wouldn't really as such call this a prologue, I would maybe say more of a blurb definitely. To make a prologue, it needs to be almost like an introduction to a story, or something that happened a day or a week, month, year, two years etc. before the actual story, or just earlier on in that day. It needs a bit more detail, and possibly if you don't want the story to be cliche, a change of plot. (:
  








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