Hey guys!
I just wanted to hear other people's opinions about one of the main characters in my story, to see if he's a little too perfect or a little too flat or cliche. Please give me your opinions if you have time for it, it would help me so much!
His name is Abel Snow (which is one of his favorite names, because he doesn't really have a name, he's an animal), and he's 3,161 years old.
He is not human, he is a fox. But like many others, he consumed human livers and got turned into a 'many-tailed fox', which is a term used to address foxes who have more than one tails and have superior physical strength. Those many-tailed foxes can turn into human forms that they desire to seduce humans and then make the human fall in love with them, so that they can eat their (humans') livers. If you eat a hundred livers, you would gain another tail. The tail is a symbol of power and rank among the many-tailed foxes.
Abel is a nine-tailed fox. It is the highest rank among foxes, with the consummation of 900 livers or more. There are a very few nine-tailed foxes remaining.
He is portrayed as a very lonely character. He wasn't that alone all his life; he used to have friends in the earlier stage of his life, but because of an event, his friends left him, and even his best friend told him to stay away from him. The event was Abel killing a mother and a father, because their child was a cross between a human and a many-tailed fox. He was especially agitated and enraged by the half-breed, because his mother had gotten killed by the Hunters, which is a group of humans dedicated to rid the world of the many-tailed foxes.
Among the many-tailed foxes, it's a really big thing to kill another fox. You get three chances: If you kill three many-tailed foxes, you are condemned to death by older many-tailed foxes, by methods that are not clear yet.
He is thrown into the major plot line by the return of the Hunters, who have been absent for many centuries. The Hunters used to have some sort of magic that could kill many foxes very easily, but it is lost now. Yet, they fight with number and weapons, while on the other hand, the many-tailed foxes don't have that many numbers but are very powerful.
When he is forced to join forces with the other many-tailed foxes, he meets the son of the parents whom he murdered, Mason, and among all the blood being spilled and threats to his entire race, he struggles with the faults of the past and his best friend, who abandoned him rightfully centuries ago.
Although to others he seems like a tearless maniac, he can still care. He doesn't really give a crap about what happens to nearly everyone in general, but he really loves his best friend, Dominic, and wishes that things would go back to the way they'd been before he murdered Mason's parents (And in here, the term 'love' doesn't refer to sexual affection, only affection between friends, like family).
As he grows to know Mason, he feels slightly guilty about killing his parents, because it wasn't really Mason's fault. So he kind of starts to protect Mason from the Hunters, along with Dominic, who also beats himself up only a little, because he knows that he could have stopped Abel from killing Mason's parents.
After the first massive attack by the Hunters, Abel struggles within himself, for he can see Dominic using him. Because he still cares about Dominic, it hurts him more than he expected, and unable to bear being around Dominic anymore, he leaves, which, later, causes him to die.
When he is finally dead, he comes to terms with what had happened when he was alive, because he realizes that he can't go back, and that the past is the past, death means over. Because of that, he is portrayed as a much peaceful and understanding character when his soul temporarily slips into Dominic's dream to tell him what he hadn't been telling anyone before dying.
He likes snow, he likes watching the stars, and he treasures his memories with Dominic (like a song he used to listen with Dominic). He is a character who has spent way too long of a time by himself, and that had taken a toll on him. He is sad, grieving and longing for what he had pushed away unconsciously, and he thinks that those emotions would be able to be calmed down by the feelings that come with killing, which is why he seems like a maniac to others. Later in the book (while he is still alive) he does start to go a little wrong in the head.
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