Ok, this is just the beginning, or plot, or....something, of a story I'm writing and I need opinions. So please tell me what you think ok?
In 2314 the earth exploded. Yes, it's a little blunt, but its the only way to put it really. Anyways, that doesn't mean it's the end of all civilization. Many plants, animals, and humans weren't shredded into pieces by the explosion. They were dead of course, but there are different organisms already out in space, just floating around. In time these "otherworldly" organisms, as the humans might have put it, found their way to earth's or what was earth, debris. The corpses were great hosts for these organisms, but there was one problem. They couldn't breathe without oxygen. The organisms were smart though, being living things and all, thy simply altered their Hosts' breathing patterns so they needed no oxygen. That was the new breed of humans, or Cabratans. The Cabratans needed a place to live and they found a small, uninhabited planet that they named Ashcar. The meaning is still unknown. The Cabratans were very secretive and told no one of their lives.
In time, the children started to change. They were growing tusks and had a strange mark on their left shoulder. This mark was the symbol for their name. At first the parents thought their children were sick when they were born, but it happened to even child when they were born. Everyone learned to except it and now, not one Cabratan doesn't have tusks and a symbol. They found use for the tusks and fight with them. Only one Cabratan, a young boy named Sander, feels like he should fight with hands and weapons. He feels like his soul doesn't belong in his body.
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