Below is a piece of description I just wrote into Country Boy. This was a little easier to get in there than usual, because Jack has just pulled into his brother's driveway, and since he's at home for the first time in two years he stands there for a minute and takes it in. If I could get some feedback on this, specifically, just to see how I'm doing - if I need more description here or if this is good - that would be awesome. Tips on slipping description into the story without stopping the story would also be helpful...this is the one thing that just gives me no end of trouble in my writing.
Cities and towns flashed by and gradually gave way to wide, flat fields abutted by woods. It was four-thirty by the time Jack pulled into his brother’s driveway, a long gravel drive in need of re-graveling where the turbulent spring had washed potholes into it. The beige house at the top of it was surrounded by soy, rippling green fields of soy that surrounded the pond and came almost all the way up to the swing set on the right side of the house and were absent on the left side only on top of the septic mound. Swallows darted over the fields, and somewhere at the edges of the property, where marshy areas still stood unclaimed by agriculture, red-winged blackbirds were calling. Jack stepped out of the car, let the dog out, and inhaled deeply.
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