So, it's in first person.
I have the hook in the beginning.
I start it really close to the 'turning point'. In fact, it starts with the turning point.
My problem is, the turning point is some sort of a 'solution', and I didn't (or, don't intend to) explain the problem first.
If I change the timeline of the story, meaning, begin it at the time the problem starts, then the whole story would change, so I can't do that.
I'll just put in the beginning to make it easier to understand.
So the story is about this angel who is supposed to teach humanity the way of life(a religion, in short), because human is currently a problem to the world(constant war, unable to live in harmony with nature, etc). The start of the story begins with God giving the task to the angel.
So the underlined is the problem, and I'm thinking I'm supposed to assume the reader would understand just by me writing down 'human is a problem, so I need to do this'.
The bolded is the beginning, and since it's the beginning, I don't want to focus on explaining the 'problem'.
So...any suggestions?
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