In my book right now I'm trying to have my protagonist hear a little girl crying from the bedroom, I want it to be a surprise in the story so how do I write that sound effect? While keeping it scary and not cheesy? Any help would be awesome!
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I'm not going to lie, I had to look up the meaning of onomatopoeia's. But I see your point so I'll try to crack the code to my novel and find another way to describe the situation!
Simply Crazed.
Once you see death up close, then you know what the value of life is. - SAW VI
"He heard a little girl crying softly. The sound came from the bedroom."
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"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach
that isn't very surprising though. If you want to take such a simplistic route you would have to add more to it... just randomly saying that could or could not be surprising or scary depending on the situation and what you wrote to lead up to that point. I suggest doing something along the lines of what Snoink said, but make sure you build up to the moment and add more to it! it will problem take some fiddling around with. good luck :]
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He heard a quiet sound from the bedroom. It was the sound of choking mixed with falling tears- a young girl was crying.
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It depends if you want him to immediately realise the sound was crying, or hear a strange sound and have to investigate. Hearing a sound and having to investigate might be more suspenseful.
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But I see your point so I'll try to crack the code to my novel and find another way to describe the situation!
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