So I'm in this one point in my book where the mysterious guy shares a really cool conversation with the MC when they're suddenly interrupted by an explosion on the temple they're in front of. Basically, it's like this:
[awesome monolouge]
BOOM [right after]
[explanation of where it came from and showing how it effects MG and MC]
I was thinking about just keeping the BOOM in there when I wondered whether there would be a better way to show instant reaction rather than akwardly going straight to the desription of the explosion, making it sound passive. Any ideas?
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