There's a certain problem some people have when writing a story, and I see it often enough that I'm going to write down the problem here and link to it during reviews.
As you should know, there are three perspectives: first, second and third-person. There are slight variations between some, such as third person limited and omniscient, but generally, perspective is split between the three easily.
First-person is when the narrator is also the protagonist of the story. Second-person is when the narrator is listening to the story being told by someone else. Third-person is when the omniscient gods are the narrators of the story.
Each one has its own uses. First-person gives a more personal touch to the story and allows for things like thoughts and monologues to be used more liberally. Second-person can be used as a way to easily explain things like the settings and natures of the story. Third-person shows all sides of a story.
I want to clear this up so I can address one of the main problems I see with some stories. Many newcomers like to write stories in first-person, as chances are they relate to the main character in some way and it's much easier for them to write that way. The problem with this, however, is that sometimes they're not writing a first-person story. They're writing a second-person story and substituting the narrator for the author.
There's a chance that when you read someone's first story, they'll try to explain very small details, such as the colour of their clothes or how their bedroom looks. When someone writes like this, it's less like the protagonist is narrating everything, but rather the protagonist is trying to explain everything to a second party. You don't regularly comment on your apparel or your bedroom, but you may do it when someone asks you about it.
This is when your first-person story has devolved into a second-person story. The narrator, however, is the author, who's trying to write something based on how the protagonist would explain it. This, of course, isn't how you would properly write a story. Doing this often leads to info dumps, pronoun games, and other things you'd want to avoid.
If you want to become a better writer, then you need to learn how to differentiate between the two. If you want to write a first person story, then you can't comment on everything like a person would. First-person protagonists don't explain things, they react to them. If you want to try writing a second-person story, then you have to have someone other than the author as the second party. The second party would generally ignore the small details, trying to focus on the overall picture.
So those are my general thoughts on the difference between first and second perspectives. This is a problem that can happen between second and third perspectives as well, but it'd take another long paragraph trying to explain, so I'm going to leave it off here. If I've sent this in a review, then I'll have tried to suggest some ways you can split the story from second-person to first or third.
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