When I write, I tend to make my characters smile to much-normally when they are talking. It always ends up with everything smiling-
"There were almost five, but one didn't make it." She said, and smiled. Johnathon nodded, and smiled as well. She smiled. He smiled. I smiled. We smiled. GEORGE WASHINGTON SMILED!"
So then it sort of makes my writing really awkward to read. Normally I do this to keep it from becoming like this-
There were almost five, but one didn't make it." She said.
"Yes, you're correct. The five we have now are important though..." He murmured.
"I know." She said.
How can I stop my characters from smiling? Or is the second way fine? I CAN'T STOP SMILING!
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