I found this little tip in one of my writing books, The Pocket Muse by Monica Wood (http://www.amazon.com/Pocket-Muse-Ideas-Inspirations-Writing/dp/1582971420)
In this passage, she recommends trying to write something, not using any form of the verb "to be" - am, are, is, was, were, all that. Doing this every so often lives up the text, in her opinion, and drives away dull voices.
Wood's examples:
Before the ditching of be:
"When she finally emerged from the house, Mary was stunned. The sun was blinding, but the weather was cold. All around her were frozen trees that had broken off at their waists. Everything was both beautiful and awful."
After the ditching of be:
"Mary emerged from the house, stunned by a blinding sun. The trees, broken off at their waists, lay over the yard, each naked branch encased in a sleeve of ice. The day felt both beautiful and awful."
Which one do you think sounds better?
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