Hello there!
Recently it was brought to my attention, by a critique from a friend, that one my main characters grins too much. Normally this wouldn't concern me, I've learned from previous experience to take critiques with a grain of salt but after rereading I've realized that I am guilty of this.
There is no particular reason for this character to grin a lot, she isn't an overly happy character but she isn't a person who hates the world. The reasoning behind it was mainly just so I could give her something to do, kind of like a filler.
So, if anyone has suggestions as to what I can make my character do instead of grin, please let me know. Considering that she grinned is dead.
P.S. Here’s the link to my first two chapters, it seems most of grinning has taken place in these:
Chapter One: The Good Life - Chapter One: Losing It
Chapter Two: The Good Life - Chapter Two: Resistance is for Losers
P.P.S. Maybe you could help me @Lucrezia You know my book pretty well!
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