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Bones that Speak



Do you watch the TV show "Bones?" (Kind of irrelevent, but I'm just curious)

Poll ended at Mon Nov 14, 2011 11:20 pm

Religiously.
2
67%
Yeah, now and then.
0
No votes
I've seen a couple of episodes.
1
33%
Do the commercials count?
0
No votes
No.
0
No votes
 
Total votes : 3


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Fri Nov 04, 2011 11:20 pm
StoryWeaver13 says...



Spoiler! :
Based on the TV show "Bones," which my whole family watches (me included). Just kind of trying to write a piece as a fan, so give me your impression, whether you know the show or not.


Clandestine composure, the cold words of the cold world of a scientist,
of love’s defining strain of dopamine, sweet serotonin bringing
what you call “delusioned shadows of emotion.”

Now you stare upon another hollow face, the mere architecture of
ourselves, this blighted bone brought down by human flaws and
silly self-sacrifice, such an act to you a mystery that breaks your laws
of rationality. Your fingers trace across a phantom cheek,
and for a moment, do you see the pleading glow of eyes now gone?

You find yourself alone with the fragmented remains of this previous person,
reflecting themselves through you the way no shattered
mirror has ever done. For a moment your finger wraps around the bone
of this dead man’s, and, in truth, do you feel it try to wrap around your own?
The work of a scientist denies all practicality in such an emotional pull.

A man waits for you, boyish brown eyes and side-swayed smile qualitative of
his inner child, an existential component yet again beyond your study.
His arm around you, you can name each bone, each binding ligament and joint,
yet like the grip of a dead man’s hold, you cannot describe your inability to release
from such a touch, a draw magnetic with the heart.
  





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Fri Nov 04, 2011 11:30 pm
LoneWolf161 says...



WOW this good my friend would love you
  





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Sat Nov 05, 2011 12:05 am
Picklesole says...



This is really well written, and a LOT of big words in it. I think it describes most of Bones well and in the very end I think you could have went into a little more detail about her conflicting emotions about Booth. Other than that, I think this was pretty good. :D
  





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Sat Nov 05, 2011 12:05 am
Picklesole says...



This is really well written, and a LOT of big words in it. I think it describes most of Bones well and in the very end I think you could have went into a little more detail about her conflicting emotions about Booth. Other than that, I think this was pretty good. :D
  








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