Young Writers Society

(A/N: There's currently a HUGE spider on my floor terrorising me, so I wrote this to try and ignore it... I don't think it helped, because I just felt like it was in my lap! Eek!)

Eek!
There’s a spider, yes a spider-
It’s crawling on my floor.

Its eyes are red, with hairy legs
And it’s moving closer.

Creeping, creeping
Like a stalker

Cripes, it’s right up to my chair
Like a silent assassin

A black swoosh,
And suddenly-

My silent assassin
Is being eaten.

No doubt the poem was random.OMG!Look the spider is on ur head.

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A little random for my liking. However I did like the structure of it. The last verse was a tad cheesy for my liking

I liked that because i am really afraid of spiders! lol

was it a cat that was eating it???????

I actually thought the spider was eaten by a bird...and then I started wondering where the blazes the bird came from.

Verses structure could use a bit of work, three lines, for the first and two lines for the rest? Ah well, I'm a little (alot) sleepy so it's not the best of times for me to be assessing stuff...

Ah well, I like it though ^_^

~Chibi

*crunch crunch* spider. yum. yeah, the being eaten at the end threw me. the rhythm is a bit erratic, but I think it works.

It was different. I did that about it. It wasn't so deep and confusing.

A black swoosh,
And suddenly-

My silent assassin
Is being eaten.

It sounds like the narrator's eating it. XD Let's hope that the narrator isn't human... otherwise, that might be a little disgusting.

SQUISH THE SPIDER!!!

That was simple, but creepy all the same. *shudders* Most likely because i'm absolutely terrified of spiders. I wasn't quite sure what ate the spider at the end though. At first I thought it was a bat, but a cat fits better, and i'm assuming that's what it was.

Hah, I like it. Creepy, though funny.

Very random.