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Course and Destination



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Sun Oct 23, 2011 6:48 pm
murtuza says...



Here's the story, of two young folks
one named Scott, and the other, Rose.
They seemed for each other, perfect
and may live happily, if ever they met.
The Fates contemplated, drew out a plan
to have them meet, now wouldn't that be grand?

So they pulled some strings
and tried their level best
for the day that would bring
Fate's ultimate test.
The moment had arrived,
as along the days climbed.

In the library, they were to be met
"Accidentally", as the Fates suggest.

Shelved in its place, the two reached for the book
and as their hands met, gave each other a look.
The Fates were dancing, eager and content,
awaiting their victory; now the trap was set.
So let's hear the account
of this story's leading couple
and for once, find out
the purpose of this fable.

Into their thoughts, let us course,
First into Scott, and then into Rose

Now our hero Scott, gives it a thought-
"Ah, two hands and only one book
but she's a lady, I can't be the crook.
To offer her it, is what I must do
What the book's about, I have no clue
So why make a fuss, I'll let her have it
And I'll go further, maybe read a comic"

Rose, with a couple of winks, pauses and thinks-
"Oh dear, The book I longed to read,
will I ever get, or will he even need?
Three days I waited, for it to be shelved
by me I so want, it to be held.
If I don't get, that book for use
I'll have to search, for another muse."

The Fates were at bated breath
while the two were at an arm's length
Scott, kind as he was, offered Rose
the aforementioned book of prose.
She kindly accepts, and they both part ways
The rulers of Fate, are now in a maze.

"Why did this happen? What wrong did we do?
Was there some mistake, in the plan we drew?"
The Fates, confused, were closely speculating
while somewhere else, someone was smiling.

Destiny, she was high above, grinning with joy
as the fates had failed; and foiled was their ploy.
For, no matter what the case,
Destiny has her own unique ways

Destiny and Fate, are two different things
But both, together, our life they bring

The former, our destination, only we can choose
the latter, the direction, in which we must cruise.

So like Scott and Rose, if your fates collide
be open, be brave. No need to hide
for your destiny, is only yours to find.
Just get ready, 'cause you're in for a ride.
Last edited by murtuza on Sat Nov 26, 2011 11:06 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Sun Oct 23, 2011 8:42 pm
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AnAmericanTeenager says...



Dear murtuza,
To be honest this form of poetry isn't my specialty. However, this piece is exceptionally unique and interesting. I love it!!!
murtuza wrote:Here's the story, of two young folks
one named Scott, and the other, Rose.
They seemed for each other, perfect
and may live happily, if ever they met.
The Fates contemplated, drew out a plan
to have them meet, now wouldn't that be grand?

So they pulled some strings
and tried their level best
for the day that would bring
Fate's ultimate test.
The moment had arrived, added to the
as along the days climbed.

In the library, they were to be met At first I wondered why you have two lines separated from large stanzas, but then I realized it added to the overall feel of the poem.
"Accidentally", as the Fates suggest.

Shelved in its place, the two reached for the book I absolutely love the occasional rhymes!
and as their hands met, gave each other a look.
The Fates were dancing, eager and content,
awaiting their victory, now that the trap was set.
So let's hear the account
of this story's leading couple
and for once, find out
the purpose of this fable.

Into their thoughts, let us course,
First into Scott, and then into Rose

Now our hero Scott, gives it a thought-
"Ah, two hands and only one book
but she's a lady, I can't be the crook.
To offer her it, is what I must do
What the book's about, I have no clue
So why make a fuss, I'll let her have it
And I'll go further, maybe read a comic"

Rose, with a couple of winks, pauses and thinks-
"Oh dear, The book I longed to read,
will I ever get, or will he even need?
Three days I waited, for it to be shelved
by me I so want, it to be held.
If I don't get, that book for use
I'll have to search, for another muse."

The Fates were at bated breath
while the two were at an arm's length
Scott, kind as he was, offered Rose
the aforementioned book of prose.
She kindly accepts, and they both part ways
The rulers of Fate, are now in a maze.

"Why did this happen? What wrong did we do?
Was there some mistake, in the plan we drew?"
The Fates, confused, were closely speculating
while somewhere else, someone was smiling.

Destiny, she was high above, grinning with joy
as the fates had failed; and foiled was their ploy.
For, no matter what the case,
Destiny has her own unique ways

Destiny and Fate, are two different things
But both, together, our life they bring

The former, our destination, only we can choose
the latter, the direction, in which we must cruise.

So like Scott and Rose, if your fates collide I love the way you ended it!!
be open, be brave. No need to hide
for your destiny, is only yours to find.
Just get ready, 'cause you're in for a ride.

you are a really good writer!!!
<3
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You ARE extremely TALENTED!

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Deanie says...



Hi murtuza!

I love this poem to bits. I am highly envious of your rhyming abilities. And I love your story about how destiny and fate are two different things. Most people think of that they are the same (including me although I don't really believe in them).

The poem told a nice story and it was very enjoyable to read.

(this isn't a very useful comment but its here anyways)

Deanie x
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farz95 says...



I loved reading this poem...
You are such an amazing and talented writer...keep up the great work !
  








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