The Secret Life of Superheroes

Charlie II · 2011-03-30T11:17:21Z

Batman yawned and stretched his arms; Robin did the same. Both of them were getting tired: they're been up late again. The bad guys had been beaten; there was nothing left to do. What else was there to pass the time? They both were feeling blue. Clark Kent slouched lower in his chair, and finished off his drink. Maybe, when he'd watched the game, he'd fly it to the sink... “Or maybe not!” he thought aloud, and threw it on the pile. Robin giggled, Batman laughed; they'd been drinking for a while. Then all at once the feeling changed, red lights began to flash! Heavy steps approached outside, then an almighty CRASH! The Hulk stomped in and raised his voice: “Get up you guys – it's day! Time to get this mess cleared up! Guess who are on their way!” Everyone leapt to their feet, their motion all a blur. Batman hoovered, Robin swept, to clean up quick for Her. They scrubbed and polished, straightened, mopped; Tidied, neatened, freshened, stopped … … Then dusted, ironed, folded clothes; Watered flowers, goodness knows! But in a moment all was clear, the evidence was gone. The proof was cleaned away from sight – they hadn't taken long! And when the doorbell rang at last, they heaved collective sighs. The only thing that Heroes fear are Super Hero Wives!

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Tue Nov 29, 2011 6:51 pm

murtuza says... · Tue Nov 29, 2011 6:51 pm

Hey, Charlie!

I'm chuckling aloud as I'm writing this review. To find our favourite superheroes in these types of situations is both endearing and funny as can be. The last stanza was pure gold!

Makes me wonder what butch and the other ruffians are like on an off day as well. Keep the ink flowing, my friend!

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Sun Dec 04, 2011 8:07 pm

Thalizar says... · Sun Dec 04, 2011 8:07 pm

Hey! Thalizar Here!

Honestly, this is one of the best poems I've read in a while. It's got rhythm, fluency and a story. I didn't check for rhymes, but I felt that there was definitely some sort of little beat to it! The idea that they all live together reminds me a lot of the Avengers or something along similar lines, Justice League etc.
There isn't much I can find to nit-pick (I am tired though, so keep that in mind! There is ALWAYS room for improvement. I had a teacher who would never give anyone an A because you could ALWAYS improve, remember that!)
Anyway! Keep it up! I enjoyed it a lot!

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Mon Dec 05, 2011 7:59 pm

Deanie says... · Mon Dec 05, 2011 7:59 pm

Hi Charlie!

I loved this poem to bits! It was really funny and entertaining to read. It all flowed well and I you are really great with rhyme. The story was great and... there is not much more I can say on this. I found it perfect in every way and I wish I wrote it myself!

ah, the envy XD

Deanie x

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