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the tears that fall- the perfection of a woman in love

Areida · 2005-05-16T02:44:48Z

she walks in the beauty of the sun, bare feet padding softly on the cool dirt fingers skimming the tops of the tall grass her laughter floats over the field and the clouds smile down on her holding back their inevitable rain she twirls happier than the most jubilant of children displaying a smile that refuses to depart her hair shining as it falls eyes sparkling like the stars to come: the perfection of a woman in love the storm comes softly on horseback unexpected she turns, the smile fading the news comes by way of a young man: a boy much like the one she is losing “he fought bravely” is all she hears before falling to the ground her fist clenched as she beats her breast the sky is now dark she hears thunder and sees the flash of jagged lightening in the sky that before was joyful with her now her tears fall unnoticed onto that same cool dirt that before she tread in anticipation and now sobs on in pain the message-bearers are gone and she is alone, face tearstained pain easily visible on her angelic face: the agony of a woman who has lost everything

Jannie

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Sat Sep 13, 2008 3:17 am

Jannie says... · Sat Sep 13, 2008 3:17 am

it was flat in some parts.
but great in others.

loved the change in moods.

It never hurts anybody to be told that they are loved.
To say to somebody, "I Love You"...
It may not change a thing, but it's nice to know.

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You must never give into despair. Allow yourself to slip down that road, and you surrender to your lowest instincts. In the darkest times, hope is something you give yourself. That is the meaning of inner strength.
— Uncle Iroh

the tears that fall- the perfection of a woman in love

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