Okay, so you have to guess what this poem is about.
I met you first in a Christmas ornament.
It was a peacock, of all non-Christmasy things, a peacock.
It was teal and green, and had white tail feathers
that sprouted out of the glass like an angel’s trumpet.
It broke when I was about 8,
when the people living under us
slammed their door in a yelling match
and sent our Christmas tree crashing to the white carpet.
I was crushed, just like those delicate shards of glass,
which were silver on the inside.
The inside was Christmasy, very Chrismasy in fact.
I didn’t realize that until it was broken though.
I glimpsed you again in my mother’s cooking.
My mother had never really been into cooking much,
not like my grandmother had been;
dinner usually consisted of basic meat and salad
or something along the like-
she was a single mom, and that made it hard,
especially when she was going to law school
and was struggling with a disability.
But she made food for me
and she provided for me, and I loved her cooking.
I still do.
Rice and chicken noodle soup cooked together. Delicious.
Sometimes, even though we aren’t struggling as much anymore,
and she has some time to make a meal that won’t leave me hungry,
I’ll ask her to make it anyways.
It tastes like childhood.
You were there again at my grandparents’.
We lived there on and off, my mom and I,
and I used to run off to the little gurgling creek
across the street to play.
I built waterfalls with stones the size of my head
and would jump in and out of secret spots,
to and from little islands that rebelled against
the creek’s softly spoken wishes,
talk to the birds and the trees and the frogs,
naming each one, of course,
and would come home soaked.
It almost seemed like tradition to get scolded for having
forgotten rainboots.
I didn’t like my rainboots. They were tweed and uncomfortable,
and on a little girl like me, came up to my knees.
I miss those.
I didn’t meet you for a while.
We moved away to another city, and I couldn’t find your familiar face.
But, then you popped up, right when I’d given up looking.
You were hiding in the tourists
with their silly camera bags and money hanging out of pockets,
just waiting for grimy pickpocket hands.
It was a statue, a statue that led to the bridge
where we accidentally ran into that impromptu music festival that one time
and we stayed and smiled in our ignorance and inability to understand the language,
though I could understand some of the Christmas carols,
thanks to my Czech class and Paní Miláčkova.
Everyone was giving food and money to the singers.
I had a little bit on me for once,
and was proud that I could give some away without worrying
about helping out with rent.
That’s the place where I saw the most beautiful woman in the world.
I think she was homeless- she had a little bit of dirt smeared across her face,
and her hair was wild. She was kind of young.
She was singing and her eyes were closed,
and she looked so happy.
She was wearing angel wings, was all dressed up for Mikolas Day.
Her wings were more white than anything else.
That’s probably my favorite place in the city.
I realized how much I’d missed you, and was really glad to have found you.
It was nice seeing you here.
I know it's a lot. It's a lot of imagery, a lot of material, and it's really simply stated. I don't know how I feel about the style in this one, and I'm not crazy about the end. To put it simply, I know it needs a lot of work.
But I'm kind of attached to it- these are all real memories, and I love them dearly.
Any thoughts on how to make it better? Or, just any thoughts at all? Thanks!
-Coral-
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