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That line just doesn't feel right. I don't know if you're trying to imply something, but it doesn't work for me. Well done, and keep writing!the way they would a man’s spine,
the mannequins lying shapeless and thoughtless
his fingers cupping the brush
the way they would a man’s spine,
her body is curled into a letter
from an unknown alphabet,
bare lines and swoops—
her dress slung over the chair
like a thread of confessions,
unraveling.
his fingers cup the brush
the way they stroke a man's wrist,
slashing the canvas
as the mannequins stare
shapeless and thoughtless,
the mosaics of his fingerprints
like eyes across the walls, the windows,
the length of her body.
light lands on her shoulder,
and now he thrusts the brush forward—
the ideal light
where each angle is illuminated,
where each bone is broken
and she is no longer a woman,
only brushstrokes.
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