Young Writers Society

Hi!
This is the first time I've tried drawing animals(birds, technically.) So tell me what you think.
Methinks the wings of the left one need to be improved, though I'm not sure how.

P.S. I'm sorry for the bad quality, my scanner isn't working.

EDIT: I put up a smaller picture.

This was very cute.

1. The parrot on the left looks old and worn out. If you meant to do that on purpose, I say hey! good job. But, if not, you should fix its droopy eyes and wrinkled face.

2. The parrot on the right looks pissed. Like, truly mad. I think it's the lines under the eye and the angle of the eye.

3. Parrots are known to be colorful and beautiful. If you want to really capture the beauty of parrots, I would suggest coloring it.

Bravo!

Classy

Hey Lava!

Overall, very nice job -- especially if you drew them without looking at a picture of a parrot. I don't know whether or not you did, but it's nice all the same.

The position of the left one looks a bit awkward. I think it's because you drew it sort of looking over its shoulder, which is difficult to draw realistically. Therefore, I prefer the parrot on the right, the measures look fine and it's all in all very well drawn. I like the shading in both parrots; it also makes me imagine the pictures are coloured. I agree with Classy though, you should definitely colour them!

Haha, I also like the branches they're sitting on.

Keep drawing!


Demeter
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Thanks Classy and Demi!
I drew the one on the left without seeing. I looked at a photo of a parrot for the right one. ><

Wow. This is your first attempt at drawing birds? They are fantastic!

I think the bird on the right needs more shading on the wing, and also, maybe a little more detail - just to make it more realistic.

The shading is really good, and the tree is really nice too!
I agree with everyone else, you should give it some colour!

Keep writing... er... drawing!

~Mo.

Hello!

Wow. Well done! This is your first attempt at drawing birds well its amazing so well done!
The only problem is one if the birds head looks a bit odd. Other than that though great! Paticularly considering that it is your first attempt!

Usually at ethis point I would say Keep Writing but that dosn't really fit so errr...
Keep Drawing!
~Lydia

Hi Lava!
I have to say this is still pretty awesome, none the less.
It sort of reminds me of a drawing I would see out of coloring book, but a lot better lol.
Left Parrot: I think the head needs to be bigger and possibly more shading with the tail. But shading really depends on what color the bird is, dark/warm colors need darker shading compared to cool colors.
Right Parrot: I think this one looks just fine the way it is.
Honestly, these are great! I think if you were aiming for a more realistic kind of look-I would suggest a lot more shading and going into the detail of the feathers and colors. Making sure every shade matches the color so it sort of resembles a black and white photo. But I like the way this is drawn, haha.
Keep it up!

~Pink

Hello, woah, you're indeed good a drawing.

They are GORGEOUS! I love them, you really have talent. I love the colours in the background, they really bring the birds into focus. The feathers look really good, well done.

Thanks for posting. Keep drawing.

~Gen

I have never reviewed ctures before even though Ive taken alot of them :p

From my humble mind, really good! I liked the parrot on the right more though


~Jasmine Bells~
Peace, Love, Writing and Chocolate

Hey, Lava,

This is good. I think it could be improved if you strengthen your lines and add shading; dark for the underside of the branch and the lower parts of the birds; it'd add a touch of realism to this, and make it more appreciative, while adding depth.

June

Not bad, not bad at all. The wings on the left, the right wing seems to extend too much to the left, and the beak curvature is a little off. (I mean by that the beak on the right has more arc than the beak on the left, which is more square.) But very nice, very real-cartoon, like some un-angle-ish anime.

Kudos on the birds! They're magnificent. It feels like they're looking at me. I especially love the shading in the darker feathers of the left bird.


The bird on the right's feathers appear too heavily penciled in. The heavy outline of all the feathers takes away from the graceful shape of the bird's wing. Also, some of the twigs on the tree look like they were done in a hurry. A good background is really important to a picture--if it doesn't look as real as the foreground, the picture loses that sense of realism.

Also, the lines of the tree branch just to the left of the left parrot disappear before you actually get to the bird. It makes it look a bit like he's sitting in thin air instead of holding onto a tree limb.

In the paler sections of feathers, you still need some texture. Not a stark outline like the other feathers--just a few very faint, swooping lines to give the impression of feathers there.

Finally, I keep trying to see it in color. It's really a wonderful piece, the only little details that could use work are miniscule. Please try doing a version of it in color! It's absolutely gorgeous.

~Vox

CUTE!!!
This drawing brought a smile to my face. I do love the tails and the branch, and just about everything ...
I'm sorry this has been absolutely pointless, but it's the thought that counts, right?
God bless, and keep drawing (you've obviously got talent),
Ignis