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When Saturday afternoon arrived, Veronica was ready. Veronica had ironed out her plan and had even rehearsed it with Kayla in study hall on Friday. At five-thirty, Veronica loaded her backpack with a change of clothes and several textbooks before jogging down the stairs. She found her parents in the living room, her Dad reading the newspaper and her Mom absorbed in one of her trashy romance novels.
Her Mom glanced up, using her hand as a temporary bookmark. “Where are you going?” She demanded arching a well-manicured eyebrow.
“Well, Kayla promised to help me on my research paper for science. I figured you’d be okay with that.” Veronica tried not to let her fear show in her eyes. She sighed dramatically. “Don’t you want me to graduate? I don’t care, I guess I could just drop-out.” She turned away, afraid her quivering voice would give her away.
“When are you going to be home?” her Mom stopped her.
“I don’t know, it is supposed to be at least ten pages. You know how teachers are, no double spacing and all that jazz. We were going to the library for a little while and then end up back at her house so we can type it up on her new computer.” Veronica thought she should take up acting, she was doing such a wonderful job.
“I don’t know. Will, what do you think?” She nudged him with her book.
“Huh?” He looked up, obviously not listening.
“I’m going over to Kayla’s to work on my science paper,” Veronica reiterated.
“Okay,” he returned to his paper.
“I expect to see a Science paper when you get back!” her Mom called, as Veronica was walking out the front door.
She was giddy with adrenaline as she halfway jogged down the street. She flipped open her cell phone and dialed Kayla. “Phase one is complete.”
“Seriously?” Kayla sounded surprised. “Wow I didn’t think you would actually have the balls to do it.”
“Yeah, well, is Delilah there yet?” Veronica snapped.
“Yeah and you should see this spread. I didn’t know there was so much stuff you could put in your hair and on your face. Don’t worry Veronica, when Keith picks you up you will look just like the hookers on COPS.”
“Great. Okay, I’ll be there in ten.”
Delilah answered the door when Veronica arrived at Kayla’s apartment. She screamed excitedly, pulling Veronica into the apartment. “We’re in the bedroom. I’m so excited for you Veronica. What did you bring to wear to the party? You are definitely a cool tone, you’ll look really good with this new eyeliner I just bought. It’ll make your eyes pop.”
“I think she’s more excited about the makeover than you are about having a real date.” Kayla mused from her dark blue futon. She looked comical in a paisley house robe and neon green eye shadow. Paramore was playing quietly in the background. “I was her guinea pig,” Kayla confessed.
Veronica laughed, fishing her outfit out of the bottom of her book bag. “You got that science paper?”
Kayla crossed over to her desk and pulled a thick stack of papers off her printer. “You owe me big time,” she said, handing her the paper. Veronica shoved it into her backpack.
“You’re wearing this?” Delilah demanded holding up a pair of skinny jeans and a t-shirt with an image of Cookie Monster on the front of it. “Are we six?” She crumpled up the shirt, throwing it into the corner and retrieved her own tote bag. Delilah pulled out a top that was hot pink, skin tight, and had a big pair of glittery lips splayed boldly across her chest.
“No way,” Veronica held up her hands.
“Just try it on,” Delilah demanded, shaking the garment at her.
Veronica relented, yanking it away from her friend‘s outstretched hand. She threw Kayla a glare, who was snickering. Veronica disappeared into the bathroom and struggled to pull the top over her head. “What is this made of? Spandex?” She turned from side to side to examine her appearance. Veronica didn’t want to admit it, but something about the shirt made her actually look shapely. She emerged from the bathroom to model the shirt for her friends.
“Fabulous!” Delilah clapped her hands. “All it needs is the right skirt.” She was back in her bag, digging around.
“No skirt, no way! My legs aren’t shaved,” Veronica protested.
“Gross.” Kayla had pulled a bag of Doritos onto her lap and was munching on the chips.
Delilah wrinkled her nose. “Who doesn’t shave their legs?”
“Uh, me, when it is thirty degrees out. Especially since I don’t even wear skirts.”
Delilah pulled something else out of her bag. It was a razor. “Go shave your legs. Even if you don’t end up wearing the skirt, there is no way you can go on a date with hairy legs.”
Kayla laughed, spraying half-chewed bits of chips all over the front of herself. “I want a picture of Veronica in a skirt for my Facebook.”
Veronica slammed the bathroom door shut. She resurfaced twenty minutes later with the denim mini-skirt on. “There is no way I’m wearing this. I feel like I’m going to moon someone.”
“Come on Veronica, you want to make an impression, right? This will definitely make an impression.”
“Two dollar, two dollar make you holler!” Kayla crowed as her digital camera’s flash went off.
Veronica sighed. “Come on guys, help me out here! Do you have another skirt I could try? This is like a strip of fabric. How much did you pay for this?”
Delilah ignored her as she offered up another skirt, this one black with lacy frills everywhere. When Veronica gave her a look she shrugged. “It’s all I have.”
“I think I’m going to be overdressed,” Veronica said as she shimmied into the skirt.
At six-thirty Veronica took a hard look at her reflection, surprised by what she saw. Delilah had relented and allowed her to wear the jeans. Delilah was still working on her hair, but her make-up had been done in a way that was dramatic and yet, still tasteful. Veronica was feeling pretty good about herself. “Okay, close your eyes.” Delilah grabbed a can of aerosol hair spray and began to douse Veronica’s hair with the stuff.
“There goes half of the Ozone,” Kayla announced.
“Just don’t stand too close to anyone smoking a cigarette,” Delilah warned, giving Veronica another spritz.
“I don’t want to be a helmet head!” Veronica cried when it appeared Delilah was going to spray more.
“The key to keeping a hair-style perfect is a lot of product. Trust me, I read it in Glamour,” Delilah assured her, arranging a strand of hair. Satisfied she stepped back so Veronica could assess her appearance. Her hair looked like it should be in a Pantene commercial.
“Wow.” Even Kayla was impressed.
“I look like a totally different person.” Veronica felt a boost of confidence.
“I’d tear that up,” Delilah purred, winking at Veronica in the mirror.
Veronica felt silly, tottering into the library in her black patent leather high heels and cosmetic-caked face. The librarian eyed her suspiciously and Veronica dived into the women’s bathroom. Breathing hard she stared at her reflection. Her eyelashes clumped together with too much mascara and her lips felt sticky from the lip gloss. What if he doesn’t come? What if it is some sick joke?
Anxious, Veronica snuck out of the bathroom and peered out the double glass doors into the parking lot. She checked the clock on her cell phone. It was six fifty-five. Too nervous to sit still, she returned to the bathroom. She bared her teeth and rubbed a smudge of red lipstick from her front tooth. Digging in the purse Delilah had lent her, she retrieved a pack of Altoid’s. She grabbed a mint and then for good measure she popped two more in her mouth. The taste was overpowering, but she grimaced through it.
Maybe he doesn’t know where the library is. Maybe he forgot and went to my house to pick me up. Panicking she checked her phone again. It was six fifty-nine. She was trying not to let her emotions get the best of her, but Veronica couldn’t help but feel sick to her stomach. What if she got caught? What if he didn’t show up? What would she do? How long would she wait before calling it quits and going home? Another glance at the glowing screen told her it was seven o’clock.
Her adrenaline pumping, Veronica scooped up her purse and exited the bathroom. She stood in the library entrance for just a moment before hearing the distinct rumble of Keith’s Mustang. When the car pulled into view, Veronica felt the smile stretch her face as she pushed the doors open. Reminding herself to take small steps, she made it to the car without falling over her feet. When she slipped into the front seat, Keith was grinning.
“Wow, you look amazing,” he said, putting the car into gear.
“Thanks.”
“So you hungry?”
“Starving.”
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