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I personally think you should scrap the rest of the sentence that follows, for effect. It drags otherwise.It was well-known fact that given a choice between the cold sea and a warm woman, the sea won out every time
Kathleen saw him look past her, out towards the ocean.
Look at me, not your mistress!
Unlike some people.
Semi-colon, I think, rather than a comma.The overcoat warmed her considerably, otherwise she might have considered dropping it
I will do my best though,” Kathleen smiled wryly at Alastor's flabberghasted features. “I was going to tell you a little later, when I was far enough along that a miscarriage is unlikely, but I don't want you coming back to me assuming that some other man has managed to get into my skirts so soon after you.”
“I won't promise to wait for you Alastor McKinsley,” she said suddenly, in a much firmer voice than before. “I won't promise because I don't know what's around the corner. Lord knows your bairn might be in need of shelter when it's born, and if that's the case, then I cannot make any promises.
I will do my best though,” Kathleen smiled wryly at Alastor's flabberghasted features.
She knew for a fact that it would be beautiful- she had been
Unlike some people.
It was then that she heard him behind her, clumsy feet shuffling through the grass as he tripped over a hidden rock or three, swearing under his breath as he stubbed his toe.
A heavy overcoat suddenly dropped about her shoulders, though its owner then stepped back a little way, instead of folding her into his arms like he would have a bare three days ago, when she found out that he was going to leave her to go on a voyage to exotic climes that might take more than a year- his captain might have mentioned Cape Town and Bombay and Madagascar, but all she had overheard as she poured his beer was “away, far, far away”.
“Him” being Alastor McKinsley, known to his crewmates as Singin' McKinsley, for his knowledge of the old tunes and his tendency to display such knowledge for the entertainment of himself and others whilst he worked was legendary aboard his ship the Desdemona.
It was well-known fact that given a choice between the cold sea and a warm woman, the sea won out every time.
Tomorrow he would set sail, and she would not see him again for a long time, if at all- whilst she knew
I'll forgive you Alastor. Truly. It's just that my heart's a little sore at you for not telling me, though my head understands why you have to go, Kathleen thought without taking her eyes from the horizon.
Why was it that she could not tell him that?
It was as she recognised this that the tears finally broke through her defenses, and with a gasping sob she threw herself into his arms, hating herself for her weakness, but loving the warmth and security that he offered as he held her gently, rubbing soothing circles into her back as he buried his nose in her curly hair, not speaking, but still conveying that it was alright, he didn't think less of her for dampening his shirt, and that she would be able to get through this.
Kathleen froze for a moment, and then began to laugh hysterically.
“I was going to tell you a little later, when I was far enough along that a miscarriage is unlikely, but I don't want you coming back to me assuming that some other man has managed to get into my skirts so soon after you.”
She supposed she could forgive him that, for she had bowed often enough to his whims in the past...
That was the thought that echoed through her head as she stood upon the hilltop, the dry-gold grass whispering against her calves as she looked out to the bay.
She knew for a fact that it would be beautiful- she had been coming to this spot to watch the sunset since she was a child, and it never ceased to amaze her just how spectacular it was every time. It never failed her.
The wind picked up a little, and she wrapped her arms around herself, shivering slightly in the sudden cold.
A heavy overcoat suddenly dropped about her shoulders, though its owner then stepped back a little way, instead of folding her into his arms like he would have a bare three days ago, when she found out that he was going to leave her to go on a voyage to exotic climes that might take more than a year- his captain might have mentioned Cape Town and Bombay and Madagascar, but all she had overheard as she poured his beer was “away, far, far away”.
Part of her was appalled at her behaviour, but that was the part that had told her she was foolish to get involved with him in the first place. “Him” being Alastor McKinsley, known to his crewmates as Singin' McKinsley, for his knowledge of the old tunes and his tendency to display such knowledge for the entertainment of himself and others whilst he worked was legendary aboard his ship the Desdemona.
It was well-known fact that given a choice between the cold sea and a warm woman, the sea won out every time.
With a seemingly herculean effort, she dragged her eyes from the clouds on the horizon to look deeply into the clouds in his eyes, those storm-grey eyes that had entranced her from the first moment of her acquaintance with him. Those storm-grey eyes that had promised her fun, mischief and good times for all.
In a few minutes, the sun would begin to set behind her, and she would be able to see the orange-gold and pinks reflected in the clouds
clumsy feet shuffling through the grass as he tripped over a hidden rock or three, swearing under his breath as he stubbed his toe.
A heavy overcoat suddenly dropped about her shoulders, though its owner then stepped back a little way, instead of folding her into his arms like he would have a bare three days ago, when she found out that he was going to leave her to go on a voyage to exotic climes that might take more than a year- his captain might have mentioned Cape Town and Bombay and Madagascar, but all she had overheard as she poured his beer was “away, far, far away”.
compressed as she did her best to ignore the man standing a step behind her [s]to her left[/s].
for his knowledge of the old tunes and his tendency to display such knowledge for the entertainment of himself and others whilst he worked was legendary aboard his ship the Desdemona.
It was well-known fact that given a choice between the cold sea and a warm woman, the sea won out every time.
I'll forgive you Alastor. Truly. It's just that my heart's a little sore at you for not telling me, though my head understands why you have to go, Kathleen thought without taking her eyes from the horizon.
His eyes had never promised to stay. She should have known better than to hope that he might.
When she found out that he was going to leave her to go on a voyage to exotic climes, that might take more than a year.
“Will y'ever forgive me Kathleen?” he asked suddenly, the light baritone of his voice uncharacteristically nervous.
She refused to speak, knowing her voice would come out in a despicable quaver, and she hated to let him see her moments of weakness.
Look at me, not your mistress! She almost wanted to shout, but she knew how ludicrous such an exclamation would sound, and so held her tongue as he licked his lips, as though preparing himself to say something to her.
“I won't promise to wait for you Alastor McKinsley,” she said suddenly, in a much firmer voice than before.
“I will be alright Alastor. I'm a grown woman and I can look after myself. When the baby comes, I will stay at my sister's- she already promised to take me in, when I told her what had come to pass.”
“I'll give you a year, Alastor. Your bairn will be born by then, and your ship should have at least turned her nose for home. If I receive no word after a year and a day, then I will consider you dead to me, whether you've drowned or left me for some island doxie, I will not care for the difference, I shall consider you dead to me in either case.”
“I'm alright, never ye worry Katie! This year'll seem long without ye, but just y'wait, I'll be back in no time at all!”
She should have known better.
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