Life and Death: A chipmunk tale

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Life and Death a chipmunk tale
BY: spaced_out

DC: I do not own Alvin and the chipmunks, I only own my OC, Matt.

PS: this takes place in 2008. The ‘munks are 18.

CHAPTER ONE: LIFE AND DEATH!

The six chipmunks were walking along. School had been great. At this point Alvin interrupts saying “look, I got a new cell phone!”

They split, and later that night, he gathered his brothers and the chipetts and tried out the cell phone.

They went outside and Alvin punched in may 1st 8:01 PM 2011. Suddenly a ghost came and said “come with me... TO THE FUTURE!” so they did.

The six were on a sidewalk and saw the six of them, 3 years older, in Dave’s car. Suddenly they saw a semi. The two crashed. The ghost punched a new date and time on the phone. May 2nd 6:00 AM.

They were in a hospital. The six were lying there, but they would not come back. Dave and Mrs. Miller were knelled by their beds crying.

Suddenly Dave started to sing.

Dave

My little boys and girls
All laying there near death
Makes me want to cry
But you don’t know what happened until it happened to you!

Both

We’re so sad and blue
We hope that you
Can see it through

Dave
But I know
That you won’t see it through
But whenever I think
I’ll miss you

End of song

A doctor came in and said “I’m sorry to have to say this, but your children are dead.”

The six could not bear it. They all sobbed. The floor was as wet as a sock in the rain.

The ghost punched in Hollywood Ca. into the phone

They were in a house. They opened the door. They saw a lady. She said “why hello. Please come in!”

A boy ran up to his mom and said “look mom, the chipmunks and the chippets are dead!”

The six said “um, no, we are right here.”
Alvin explained everything to the boy who’s name was Matt.

Matt punched in a date. May 1st 2008.

Chapter 2: May 1st 2008

The six looked like the six they were watching. It was 3:15. Alvin said “hey, mind if we talk?”

The six said “yes”.

Alvin tells them “look in 3 years you will die.” He tells them more and punches in “rich city cemetery.” They see six graves. The tombstones read

Name
If I were you
And you were me
Then there would be
No impossibilities
- Matthew Romick

The six were scared. So Simon punches in “September 23 1996” into the phone.

“Why are we going then? Because I was born?” asked Matt. The six said “NO!! That day was the day we first meet. It was love and first sight.”

This was followed by several minutes of kissing, which Matt does not want you to see.

Matt pressed the button, and off they went.


CHAPTER 3: September 23 1996

They were on a dock. The munks were surprised on how young they looked.

Dave said to the boys “Now don’t pick up any girlfriends while I’m gone to talk to Mr. Head of record company.”

The boys said “OK!”

Suddenly the chipetts walked off the ship. They ran over to Alvin and his brothers.

“Hey Brittney. What? Am I dreaming?” said Alvin.

“Um no.” said Brittney

“Mind if we kiss then?” said Alvin

“Sure” said Brittney

This was followed by much kissing and Matt did not cover any eyes. For this was the start of something new.

Alvin thought “wow, I’ve know her for so long and I forget about our first kiss?”

Matt thought in Alvin’s head “have you thought about marriage?”

Alvin screamed “EW! NO!” This made Matt laugh.

He went up to them and said “sorry to break up the love fest but I need you six to come to the future. To save your skins.”

The six said “no way.”

Alvin said “guys, come on out.”

And the six munks saw their future selves.

“Oh, and you’ll have time for more love fest once your married” said Simon.

Then Alvin pressed in May 1st 2011 7:01 PM.

And off they went.


CHAPTER 4: May 1st 2011

They were surprised at how they all looked. They thought and thought.
Alvin said “hey mind if we talk?”

The six said “ok.”

Alvin said “in an hour you will be involved in a car crash and die.”

The six said “Ok. We will come with you.”

Without must haste they headed off to time and space.
Matt pressed the button that said “space and time.”

And off they went.


Chapter 5: space and time journey

They were at the base of a door. Matt opened it. They had a long walk. They were walking when Brittney started to talk to her 2011countrpart.

“Well, I was wondering, about you and Alvin?” said Brittney

“Nothing can come between us” she said dreamily

Then Matt had one last thing to do. He looked at his cell phone. He teleported Zac and Vanessa to where ever they are.

“Yo Z and V! How’s it going on HSM 3!” asked matt

“Fine.” Said Zac

They continued on. The night soon came upon our 27 heroes. They decided to sleep here for the night.

“night.” Said Matt

“night.” Said the rest

Soon day was upon them and they were ready for day 2. They walked and the portal started to get weirder. Then our heroes came upon a Spinks.

“What is once in a day, once in a year, and never in a month?” said the Spinks

“That would be the letter A” said Vanessa

They continued on. They found that time and space were intertwined but they felt like something was not right. They saw a castle. There was a gate that was open. Into that our heroes stepped, not knowing what would happen once they meet the king of the castle.

CHAPTER 6: THE TASK OF KING OZA!

The six marched into the room. There was a king behind the thrown.

The king said “oh munks and humans, do this for me and I will let you pass: kiss.”

“THAT’S IT?” yelled the heroes

“Yes.” said king Oza

So they did. Matt knew that this could be the start of something new.

They all knew that this was the start of something new.

They passed. They started to walk. They walked for many suns and moons until they reached a giant castle.

Little did they know what would happen behind the door

CHAPTER 7: the battle for time and space

The door was open. They had no idea what would happen.

A voice said “come in.”

Suddenly battle droids surround the munks. They pulled out their blaster guns and yell “TAKE THAT YOU BUCKETS O’ BOLTS!”

AT THE SAME TIME

Zac was running with Vanessa. A hand reached out and snatched Vanessa away from her boyfriend\costar\ love of her life.

AT THE SAME TIME

Matt ran up to a man in a cloak.

“The time was come young Matthew Romick, I am the E-V-I-L master, bringer of your doom!” said he

“Let’s battle then” Matt said and whipped out a light saber.
E-V-I-L master did the same.


AT THE SAME TIME

More and more droids came, but the munks kept blasting until there was no more.

AT THE SAME TIME

Vanessa was in carbonate. Zac ran up the steps. He knocked out the guards. He unfroze Vanessa, and that was that.

AT THE SAME TIME

Matt saw what had happened. He saw some goons take away his friends.

He yelled “I will win this battle. No matter what, so as for me GIVE ME LIBERTY OR GIVE ME DEATH!”

“Oh I think I have some people you want” E-V-I-L master said

He pulls a curtain and Matt saw his friends dangling into a pit of lava.

E-V-I-L master said “Any last words before your hot bath?”

“YES.” said Alvin

“You murdered our parents, Brittney’s, Jeanette’s, and Eleanor’s too!” said he

E-V-I-L master patted Matt’s friends.

“You can eat my food, dirty my house, and tarnish me rep, BUT NO ONE CAN KILL MY FRIENDS OR THEIR PARENTS! GET YOUR STUPID HAND OFF THEM YOU FREAK!”

Matt cuts off his hand that is on Vanessa.

“Oh you’ll never win because you’re a nOOb. Said E-V-I-L master

Matt cuts off his right leg.

“HAHA!” said matt

“The pen is mightier then the sward” said E-V-I-L master

Matt cuts off his left leg and hand.

“You can do all you want with me, but if you lay a finger on my friends or me I’M GOING TO SERVE YOUR HEAD AND PUT IT ON A SILVER PLATTER!” said matt

He puts a nose on Matt.

“Matt, I am your father.” Said E-V-I-L master

“WELL I DO NOT CARE, YOU DID BAD THINGS TO MY FRIENDS AND THE WORLD SO HERE’S YOUR JUST DESSERT!” yelled matt

He cuts off his head and puts it on a sliver platter.

A voice says “All will be well in 2011.”

Matt said “why don’t the munks and me and Zac and Vanessa head to 2011 and the rest of you to your times?”

They all agreed and said good-bye. Then they were gone, leaving the 2008 munks and Matt and Zac and Vanessa.

Matt pressed 2011 8:01 May 1ST in the phone.


CHAPTER 8: May 1st 2011

The 9 were where they were last time. They saw a Dave’s car swiftly turn away from the truck.

This was a victory.

They yelled “HUZZA! All is well! HUZZA!”

They thought and thought about what to do.

Mat said “how about a concert? We all need some time to chill and a concert would be that.”

They all agree.

They press September 23 2008 into the phone.


CHAPTER 9: a concert... and a surprise!

Alvin was nervous.

He knew tonight was the night. “But why tonight?” he thought

Matt knew. It was 12 years of love for the six.

And it was time to take action.

The show started by Matt saying “Hello. I am Matthew Romick one of three esteemed people to meet the munks and see them in true love over the past week. As a fun and long lasting event like this should be dedicated to another long lasting thing: LOVE! So for tonight I present you Alvin and the chipmunks (and three humans) with: concert o’ love!”

The people cheered!

Matt said to the eight “just do what we do, and ROCK!”

Alvin said “Well this is a little something I like to call “where we stand”.”

ALVIN

I’d like to know
Where we stand
Where we stand in love

Brittney

Yes I would too
But let us take it slow
But not too slow
Oh oh

Alvin

Let us be friends for a while
But we are more then that
I remember our first kiss
It was twelve year ago

This was not the song Brittney had done at practice yesterday.

Not even close.

But she sang.

Brittney

But love is what I want
And I’m in love with you
And so I want to know
That we’re in love

Alvin usually came up with the scams. But it was not him. It was Matt, Zac and Vanessa.

The two sang.

BOTH

Oh love is strong
But strong is what we are
And what we are
Is LOVE!

END OF SONG

The concert went by fast.

Now it was time for the closer. The proposal. The first step into their new lives.

He had the six get into two lines and read off two screens.

THEY READ:

(ALVIN, SIMON, THEODORE)

ALVIN: Brittney,
SIMON: Jeanette
Theodore: Eleanor

(OPEN BLACK BOXES)
ALL: WILL YOU MARRY ME?
-------------------------------------
(Brittney, Jeanette, Eleanor)

ALL: YES!

Matt said “This is not a prank. Or an ergonomic media obsessed fool. This was set up by me and Zac Efron and Vanessa Hudgens. We have observed the chipmunks in love. This is what has been going on for 12 years. I have been alive for all of it. “TO MANY YEARS OF HAPPINESS!” Matt yells “HUZZA!” yells all

The six kiss.

CHAPTER 9: The wedding

The wedding was a HUGE event. Alvin was scared out of his mind. Simon and Theodore were too. So were Jeanette, Brittney, and Eleanor.

Soon they were ready. Matt started this. He would end it. Like a good friend should.

Matt said “Hello all. I am here with you to wed these beloved chipmunks today.”

“But before that will happen, the chipmunks, I, Zac Efron, and Vanessa Hudgens will sing a song”

MATT

If I was ever asked
To wed 6 chipmunks
I’d say you’d be crazy
But today I am

ZAC

If I was ever said
To battle a evil guy
I’d say your brain is in two
But I did that

Vanessa

If they ever said
That evil would be next to me
I’d say that they gone crazy
But I did that and more

ALL

YES today our friends are getting married
And we think that their love is ever strong
But let us get to the wedding
And
Enough
Of
This
Singing
Stuff
YA!
END OF SONG

The six were up as the song ended.

Matt said “family, friends, and assorted others from the media, we gather today in the celebration of holy matrimony. I wish to wed you six in the matters and the power invested in me by the U.S. government and the world! The six have prepared their vows.

Alvin said “Brittney, we’ve been together since forever. We have fought, but all that is all behind us. After the recent accident with the car, I realized I loved you and I needed you more then ever. And I have one thing to say, and that is that I love you.”

Simon said “I agree with Alvin on most points. Jeanette, we have been all around the world, done it all, and I’m happy to have Matt wed us until death do us part.”

Theodore said “I agree with both of them. Eleanor, we have done more then I can think, been in hot air balloons, gone on a U.S tour that made us stars, and much more. All I wish to say is that I love you.”

Brittney said “Well, the men have a point. But after all me and Alvin have been through, it amazing we have got this far. As I have, and will, say I love you. “

Jeanette said “First, Matt, thank you for doing this. Without you, I never would have seen that I was in love. Simon, those words sum it up. For all of us. I just wish to say, I love you.”

Eleanor said “Theodore, I know that after all we have done, we have been apart. But now nothing matters. I love you, and that is that.”

Matt said “As I have said over the days, this is the start of something new. Now in the house of the lord, and not the legal house, I wish to wed you. All you must say is I do.”

Alvin Aaron Seville, will you take Brittney Marion miller in your hands, with sickness, until health, and until all comes to an end, or death do you part?”

“I do.” Said Alvin

“And Brittney Marion Miller will you take Alvin Aaron Seville in your heart with sickness until health, and that all comes to an end and death do you part?” said Matt

“I do.” Said Brittney

“Simon Luther Seville will you take Jeanette Susan Miller in heart and mind with sickness until health, and until all things end and death do ye part?”

“I do.” Said Simon

“Jeanette Susan Miller, will you take Simon Luther Seville into your heart and mind and in sickness until health, or when all things come to an end and death do ye part?” said Matt

“I do.” said Jeanette

“Theodore Judas Seville, will you take Eleanor Andorra Miller in your mind in sickness until health, or when it all comes to an end and death do you part?” said Matt

“I do.” Said Theodore

“Eleanor Andorra Miller, Will you take Theodore Judas Seville in your mind in sickness, until health, or when it all comes to an end and death do you part?”

“I do.” Said Eleanor

“As my book said... oh what the heck... YOU MAY KISS THE BRIDE ALREADY!

The six kiss.

The crowd cheers.

Then at the presence moment a black thing swings down and gets the six.

“Zac, Vanessa, CODE RED! I REPEATE CODE RED!” yelled Matt

They venture out to their car and the chase was on!


CHAPTER 10: The chase and a battle

The 3 were in hot pursuit. They were gaining on the car. The car turned down an old dirt road and spun 360. The car turned down a darkened ally.

The car activated its hyper jets. Matt activated their jets of fire. They sped all over town. They then stopped and came to a nuke waste dump.

The three got out of the car. The other car did so as well.

A man said “I will give you back your friends, if you can defeat me!”

That was the E-V-I-L master.

“Fine. I’ll do it.” Said Matt

They got upon a raised platform.

They get out light sabers.

Matt said “hello.”

EV-I-L master said “I am the E-V-I-L master. The other one was a robot.”

Matt cut off his left arm.

“We meet again”

“Yes we do”

Matt cuts off his right leg.

“I will win”

The E-V-I-L master advances closer. Matt is down for the count.

Matt hears a voice, it says “Do, as you did and save your friends young one.”

“Oh, Matt, I have some peeps you want”

He revels Matt’s 8 friends, hanging from the edge of the building.

“YOU KILLED THEIR PARRENTS, MADE THEIR LIVES TRAGIC, AND ARE EVIL!” yelled Matt

“I’m laying a finger on them” said E-V-I-L master

Matt cuts off his left leg.

“YOU CAN KILL ME! BUT DO NOT EVEN DO ANYTHING TO MY FRIENDS OR YOU’LL BE DEADER THEN A DODO AND YOUR HEAD WILL BE ON A SILVER PLATTER!” yelled Matt

“You’re a nOOb-tastic nOOb.” Said E-V-I-L master

Matt cuts off his left arm.

“You can hurt me, take away me stuff, and tell lies ‘bout me. BUT NO ONE KILLS MY FRIENDS OR THEIR PARRENTS!” yelled Matt

“Matt forgive me, I am your father, and I will change” said E-V-I-L master

“NO YOU WILL NOT, YOU WILL KILL EVERYONE ELSE! AND FOR THAT HERE IS YOUR JUSTLY DESERVED DESSERT!” screamed Matt

He cuts off his head.

The nine all cheer.

“Now let’s port out of here.” Said Matt

The nine agree.

They port to home.


CHAPTER 11: here we go again!

They had a week to do what they usually did.

Matt said “I know! Let’s go some where!”

The nine agree.

Suddenly a portal opened.

Vanessa screamed.

Matt yelled.

They all yelled “HERE WE GO AGAIN!”

THE END!

Hoped you liked it!
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Last edited by spaced_out on Sun May 18, 2008 3:20 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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It was a good plot, but the use of copyrighted characters is plagerism and is illegal. I recomend you change the story a bit to make it your own.




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tensazangetsu329 wrote:It was a good plot, but the use of copyrighted characters is plagerism and is illegal. I recomend you change the story a bit to make it your own.


NOTE: we are in the fan-fiction section. This means I can use Alvin and co.

READ THIS: DC: I do not own Alvin and the chipmunks, I only own my OC, Matt.

And I need you to tell me what I did wrong, or well.
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spaced_out,

Fanfiction, aye? Well, that “Review for Food” section certainly broadens my horizon as a critiquer ^^. I’ve never read or watched this, but I’ll try to do my best. However, I’d like to add a disclaimer myself - your critique will be different then others (of mine, that is). Instead of a line-by-line one, with impressions after, I’ll give you something else. But, onward, no?


WHAT YOU DON’T HAVE:

-> Dialogue punctuation (the non-dialogue one was more or less fine). You might want to check out some articles about that, either here on YWS (I dimly remember one on that subject) or somewhere else. Proper punctuation is a really big asset when it comes to writing.

-> Line breaks. I probably should elaborate here. See, I want to know - visually - when one section, or chapters, starts, and the former one ends. So, press enter an extra time, or add asterisks?

-> Italics. That song, for example, should be in them. That’ll help it stand out more, and not hide between any other text.

-> Descriptions, details. Right now it’s a bit vague, you know?


WHAT YOU HAVE:

-> a plot.

-> action.

-> interesting elements, e.g. songs.



WHAT I WANT TO SEE IN THE EDITED VERSION: I remind you that I have not seen the film, and, truthfully, I was a bit lost. Bear in mind that you might stumble upon such a reader. So, add necessary info (spread it all through the story) and intros. I also want to see more description. I want details. Instead of just: “Suddenly a ghost came and said”, elaborate. Give more details - how did the ghost look like? Where did it come? Were the characters surprised by his coming? You know, that kind of thing. Generally, I want you to expand, and not to rush so much - that concerns not only the example, but other scenes, too. Also, didn’t it later on turn into something of a script?




Cheers,
Esme



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