Young Writers Society

Just something a little different that I thought of in the spur of the moment. Suggestions are, of course, welcome so keep 'em coming. See if you can guess what the poem is about.

I watch you in the dead of night,
With eyes that shine with pure delight;
Or is it all simple insight
For me to watch your tragic plight,
Would sure bring screams of ample fright.

As a poem this is a little short, and personally I think continuous rhyme gets slightly annoying.

As a riddle I like this... though I still haven't worked out what it's about...

*Thinking hard*

I'm intrigued.

This was very cute. I actually though the continuing rhyme worked.

- Line three was a bit odd and I really think it makes very little sense. Consider something else?

- It was very short. It looked a bit like a Haiku rather than a poem so try to lengthen it?

Was it about some sort of creature of the night? A vampire or werewolf?

Alainna
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It's a fun little poem but that's just it; it's little and too short for me.

I liked it. Reminded me of a song that has zip to it.
It was a fun little poem, but I couldn't guess what it was, sorry. Maybe the moon?
shanan-cat

Ummm....traffic lights? Its a lame guess but it's all I got at the moment, my brain is kind of mush from algebra.

Um, elaborate.

Right now, it's x, an abstract variable. Make it tangible. Please. You've got something good here.

The ryhme didn't work for me. Other than that, I really liked it. Please, expand! This theme deserves a longer poem!

Line three seems to just... throw it off a little, yes? It's a bit shorter than the others. I think you should make the poem as a whole a bit longer; you know, for those of us who can't guess what the speaker is... well, speaking about.

I guess... something dark. Vampire? *has vampires on the brain*

Loved it. I can't write mysterious poetry. It's just like, here's what happened... blah... blah. I awknowledge your wonderous talent.

ahhh i love riddles...

but i have absolutely no idea what the answer to this one is.