Hi guys! well this is my first time posting a story on this account, had to make a new one since I can't get into my old account (phoenix) :[ I don't know if any of you read my story 'Shadow of paradise' but this is basically a development upon that since I changed the story line quite a bit. I'm not sure if I'll go onto develop this into a full novel since I'm still figuring some stuff out with it but I felt like writing so I thought I'd have a stab at writing the prologue.
Comments and crit appreciated! x
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Pain surged through my body like an angry bolt of lightning. It twisted through my veins and choked my senses as I struggled desperately to breathe.
‘Please! Just leave me alone!’ I tried to scream, but my words came out in a scrambled mess of whispers. I thrashed my body from side to side, scratching bloody rivers all along my arms and legs as they cut against the gravely ground.
My eyes were blurred with streaming tears and sealed with fright. At least in the darkness, I didn’t have to see them. But their cruel laughter splintered through my heart like a jagged knife and made the pain even more unbearable. Amidst the howling cackles and my thundering heartbeat they uttered words of malevolence. Words that made me want to curl into a ball and get smaller and smaller until I just crumbled away into nothing.
‘You’re a freak, nature girl!’ they spat, ‘You don’t belong here, and you never will.’
‘Don’t kid yourself that you could ever be a magician, you’re just a freak!’
The fact that I knew they spoke the truth was what made it even harder to bear.
I don’t know how long I lay there in the freezing darkness, submitting myself to their torture. Seconds? Minutes? Hours? I don’t really know, because soon enough I became numb to the agonizing pain, their words and laughter merging together to form a hazy blur of spite.
I may have fainted, because when I finally dared to open my eyes, I found myself submerged in darkness. Night had draped it’s shadowy, star-encrusted veil over the heavens. I tried to move my hand, but a sharp, throbbing twinge echoed through it. My eyes watered as I bit my lip from the pain.
I stared helplessly into the blackness, and a flicker of silver at the corner of my eye caught my attention. I turned and saw it was a steel cup. I was just about to turn away when I noticed it move slightly.
Confused, I wondered if it had just been blown by the wind… but the night was still. Suddenly I came to a realization.
‘Oscar?’ I whispered. I noticed a change in my voice. I sounded weaker, though it wasn’t just from the physical pain. I felt as though my already broken soul had been shattered.
I pulled myself up and struggled along the ground towards the cup, trying to ignore the agonizing aches. Collapsing, I reached out my hand and pulled it up.
‘Oscar…’ I sighed with relief, chucking the cup to the side, ‘I’m so glad you’re alright.’ The pretty snow-white bird, who had been trapped inside the metal container, swooped up into the darkness above. Moments later, he plunged back down to perch on my arm which was splayed across the stony earth.
‘Those damn magicians!’ he exclaimed angrily, ruffling his feathers in annoyance, ‘look what they’ve done to you! Why if I was their size I’d-‘
‘It’s okay…’ I cut in, tears rolling down my cheeks as I smiled faintly. I paused, trying to think of something to say which would make everything better, but I couldn’t think of anything.
‘I’ll be fine,’ I lied.
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I was destined from the moment I was born to be an outcast. At least, from my kind. Because in my world, it means everything to be a magician - something I can never be.
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