Young Writers Society

AAAYYYRRRAAA!

Why are you so incredible? I still can't believe how eloquent your prose is. Curdled moonlight...sheer genius.

There is nothing wrong with this. Every line is pure and piercing, just like the knife.

Fantastic. I'll be looking out for the next part.

this is.....excellent.
Short, to the point and obviously well thought-out

PM me when you write more please!!!

Aw, thanks!
I'll be adding more tomorrow, since now I'm not supposed to be on the computer...*shifty eyes*

*blinks*

wow...

that was amazing. i love your use of adjectives....extremely original.

wow.

Thanks!
I'm currently working on chapter one, but seeing as I can only get on during school ('cuz I'm grounded) I won't be able to post it for a while yet.
Cheers,
Narf
-Ayra

Wow Ayra. Honestly, I think you are the best Writer I have ever seen who's even under 18. You are outstanding! I have sloppy, short, un-detailed (I know it's not a word..) stories that I thought were good but then WOW! I read yours. You have amazing talent.Don't ever forget that

Nikki

Thanks Nikki!
I appreciate the compliments. But I'm sure you'll find that there are plenty of bette young writers on the site.

But you're really good!

Wanna read my short...thing?( I wouldn't exactly call it a story, mroe like a guide)

It's a few paragraphs long and in non-fic
called A guide to snowshoveling

I wrote in school while the teacher was going on about area. ( I would think that 7th graders would knows what l and w stand for)

Thanks!
I'll try to read your guide, but I'm grounded so it might be a while before I get around to it.

like ur oter piece tis is ****! 'curdled moonlight'? how can moonlight b curdled? and how can pine trees be dusky?

Yuppers. It's short. But very beautiful. ^_^ I have no help for you, except to say that though this style is lovely, don't write the whole story like this. I love description, but I get tired quickly if smothered in it. Also, the problem with metaphors is that they're vert passive, somehow. Actions done in metaphor don't feel done, they're implied. Thus, lots of fancy descriptions means not lots of stuff happening. Just my two cents for when you continue. Hope it will be of some help.

^_^ Keek!

Thank-you!

Don't worry, the style is only for the prologue. And maybe some flashbacks, but I'm not sure.

Flashbacks! XD I wrote a whole story about a character who can only remember things through flasbacks. I think her name was Zeela. ^_^ No plot, of course.

btw. Is this a small bit of the prologue, a sort of intro to the prologue, or does this scene continue?

Hehe, that sounds like fun! I love writing flashbacks.

This is just the first part. There's a second, in which Isaria is asking Guinevere to go and enroll as a student at Ayra's school and all. Maybe I'll post it here?