Mr.Hyde and I(II)

I was sitting in the garden
when I saw a man sitting on the bench
his head hidden behind the black hat
and he holds a wooden staff.

I looked at the bright sky
many questions lingering in my head
the man should not be Mr.Hyde
because he was only out at night.

But I still can not feel calm
so I decided to come close to him
he smiled at me when he saw me coming
and ready to swing his staff toward me.

He was Mr.Hyde who hates children
and always carry his wooden staff anywhere
I had expected about it already
he is now dominates the morning gray too.

First things first , There's no rhyming, sometimes the poem doesn't need rhyming but in this case I have a feeling as a reader that it really did need rhyming. There wasn't any proper structure as well. I hope you take my comments positively and keep on trying.
Sincerely,
Zaid.

Hi rysa,

First of all, if you'll allow my boldness, I would just like to go through and give you some grammatical corrections (in addition to stylistic nitpicks). Things I changed are in red.

I was sitting in the garden
when I saw a man sitting on the bench
his head hidden behind the black hat
and he held a wooden staff.

I looked at the bright sky
many questions lingering in my head
the man should not be Mr.Hyde
because he was only out at night.

But I still could not feel calm
so I decided to come close to him
he smiled at me when he saw me coming,
and ready to swing his staff toward me.

He was Mr.Hyde who hates children
and always carries his wooden staff everywhere
I had expected about it already
he is now dominated the morning gray, too.

Well, grammatical corrections aside, I actually really liked this. It wasn't too dramatic, very light. If I may, sort of like eating a souffle when expecting a loaf of bread. Almost prosey, but not overly so, and I disagree with Zaid in that I think that it absolutely does not need to rhyme. In fact, I like it the way it is.

If there was a continuation of this, I would be very interested to read it. Actually, I see that this isn't the first part, and will be off shortly to check out the first bit.

Nice work on this, I like it a lot!

Sarebear