Temporal Tears

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The year is 2011. The place, New York City.
Dark clouds have gathered over the busy streets, and strange people have started pacing the sidewalks. These people have emerged from rips in space and time to stop, or cause, a terrible new evil- from the past and the future they come, combining forces to perform unknown deeds.

They form two groups as they find each other. These two groups are mixed, with characters from the past and the present forming alliances. The groups do not know about each other, but probably will soon.

Aside from this, two shady characters have been witnessed wandering the streets, carrying strange weapons and equipment, disappearing and reappearing at will and surveying the streets for these rips in time; attempting to close them, some say.

As the story unfolds, you will discover good characters and bad characters within these two groups, unlock the villain's motives and discover just who these mysterious street wanderers really are.


Rules

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Normal YWS and SB rules.

400 word limit per post.

There is one antagonist who can be claimed and created on a first come, first serve basis. I thought we'd try something different here- if you're up for the responsibility of controlling the main antagonist in the story, then just post quickly and tell us you'd like to have the villain.

Characters can be from the past, present or the future, but don't overdo it with either time periods, ie. I really don't want loads of characters from the future because "ooh! Lazer guns" and I don't want loads of characters from the Victorian era because "ooh! Steampunk". If a character has already filled a time period, please try to have another one.

Characters must be human. I don't want them to come from so far back in past that their neanderthals, or so far forward that they're aliens, or some super-evolved life forms.

Characters cannot come from beyond the year 10,000. It will come clear why as the story progresses.

One character each, please.

Maximum of 18 characters allowed- 6 from the past, 6 from the future, 5 from the present and 1 villain.

No Mary-Sues/ Gary- Stus if it can be helped.

Keep it in New York. Having characters fly to other countries and cities would make it complicated. New York's a big place, with lots of room for stories, so there really shouldn't be any complaints here.

Very open world. You can control the motives and events surrounding your character.

Swearing and violence is allowed, but no graphic sex scenes. Romance is allowed, of course, but nothing explicit.


Please use this character sheet to create your character.

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Name:
Sex:
Age:
Time Period (Year):
Appearance:
Personality:
Flaws:
Abilities/Skills:
Motives:
Past:



The two figures are Temporal Wardens. These are the characters of I, BadlyDrawnLightning and my co-storyteller Sandvich. We alone can control these characters- we shall notify you on the decisions they make within the story, and you can meet them, but you cannot control their actions.

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The Wardens

Name: Warden One
Sex: Male
Age: Unknown
Time Period (Year): 20,789
Appearance: Wears a thick, black uniform made from an undiscovered but very strong and flexible element. Also wears this material over his entire face, making it look perfectly round and flat. Has a camera where his right eye would be. Strong physique and very tall and intimidating.
Personality: Gruff, almost robotic. Attempts to cover up his despair at his eternal life with anger and aggression; doesn’t always work. Is brutal when he kills, although never says that he enjoys it- is often very quiet after a kill, and will never look at a corpse he’s handled. Only kills when is forced to, but allows his anger, almost a second side of him, to escape when he does so.
Flaws: Will prioritise his mission over saving any friends or accomplices he makes. Has limited intelligence- extremely dependant on Warden Two to make decisions.
Abilities/Skills: Expert with all manner of weapons. Above average strength and agility. Psychic link with temporal partner.
Motives: Will die if he steps a foot out of line and does not protect the Temporal Flow.
Allegiance: Temporal Guardians.
Past: Committed atrocious crimes against the Temporal Guardians, has now had his mind “repaired” ie brainwashed to complete tasks for the Guardians and protect the Temporal Warps.


Name: Warden Two
Sex: Male
Age: Unknown
Time Period (Year): 20,789
Appearance: Wears a thick, black uniform made from an undiscovered but very strong and flexible element. Also wears this material over his entire face, making it look perfectly round and flat. Has a camera where his right eye would be. His form is almost skeletal.
Personality: Never shows any traces of guilt for anything he does. Is physically incapable of doing anything that may compromise his mission. Hates being alive, but cannot kill himself or allow anything to kill him because it would compromise his mission. Often makes dry, dark jokes. He finds a strange joy in killing – he says it is the only thing that keeps him sane. This psychopathy shocks all the other Wardens, except Warden One.
Flaws: He used to be rash and reckless, but Transformation removed this. Even now, though, he still finds the urge to kill overwhelming sometimes.
Abilities/Skills: Expert with all manner of weapons. Above average strength and agility. Psychic link with temporal partner.
Motives: Will die if he steps a foot out of line and does not protect the Temporal Flow.
Allegiance: Temporal Guardians.
Past: Along with One, he committed atrocities the like of which the world had never seen before. Consequently, he was forced into the Temporal Guardians and Transformed.
“It is the tale, not he who tells it.”
― Stephen King

“If you don't have time to read, you don't have the time (or the tools) to write. Simple as that.”
― Stephen King

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Ooh! Pick me! Hopefully I'll have time to post with school...

Name: Claria Renel
Sex: Female
Age: Sixteen
Time Period (Year): 1250 (the medieval era)
Appearance: She is 5'5", pretty tall for her time. She has wavy black hair that flows halfway down to her elbows and deep blue eyes. She is fair-skinned, and although she obviously appeared in medieval wear, she usually wears a plain white short-sleeved shirt with a purple jacket and dark blue jeans, with plain tennis shoes.
Personality: Claria has lots of bold ideas and morals; however, when it comes to conflict or dealing with strangers she becomes very timid. Although she rarely stands up for herself, when she feels truly threatened, she can get very fierce, as well as when one of her friends is being threatened, hurt or targeted; she can be really protective, even if she herself is a doormat. Claria believes very much in equality, and she is rarely rude or standoffish except during occasional spells of anger.
Flaws: She often forgets her own emotional needs sometimes; but, sometimes, she'll become randomly irritated at basically everyone no matter what they're doing. She can get pretty unreasonable at those times and it's best to avoid her.
Abilities/Skills: Claria is skilled at fighting with knives; she is also an excellent horseback rider (for all the good that'll do in New York). She also knows how to be silent when she needs to.
Motives: Claria believes that everything is for a purpose. As of the beginning at least, she's just trying her best to figure out what she's supposed to do in this strange new world of NYC.
Past: Claria's parents were both exiles; consequentially, she was born and raised in a remote cabin in the woods. After living with only her parents for ten years, her parents moved her to a village so that she could live in society.
Last edited by Ranger51 on Sun Nov 27, 2011 7:46 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Temporal Warden Two reporting for duty. :)

Ranger51: The characters don't know why they're in New York. Also, the groups are something I'm not totally sure about myself yet. I'll ask BDL at school today. :)
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Hey Guys :)

Plot is really good! :)
Here's mine:

Name: Reggie Nguyen

Sex: Male

Age: 34

Time period: 2011

Appearance: Homeless. Wears a large oversized trench coat with a very large hood tends to pull it down when he feels uncomfortable with social situations. Wears old army uniform under clothes and carries cut out obituaries of soldiers in pocket, when asked about them he freaks out and tries to maintain the impassive facade he has going. He is also relatively clean and well kept. Short black hair, African American (Might be the source of racism as for people from the past) and about 6.4/6.5 foot in height. ‘Boyishly handsome’

Personality: Know what he wants and when he wants it. At first comes of cynical, defeatist and downright depressing, but he suffers from shellshock so that is why he is living on the street after losing control of his depression and finance situation. He is also loyal, open minded and empathetic.

Flaws: Anxiety, claustrophobic and paranoia. When confronted with danger at the beginning he freezes up and becomes incapable. He suffers from insomnia and very serious nightmares. They depict the scenes from his army days. Socially awkward and has a sharp tongue. Suffers more than anyone else knows.

Abilities/Skills: Brilliant intelligence and amazing skill with weapons and self defence.
Motives: Feels it as a way to repent from all the lives he took and to finally have peace with his conscience.

Past: Normal family life. He joined army at 16 with army intelligence. At 28 entire barrack blew up. Only one who survived and has been trying to repent ever since. Girlfriend also left when things got hairy so comes off as rather sexist.

:)
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Name: Leonardo Salvesteer (sal-vest-ear)

Sex: Male

Age: 46

Time Period (Year): late 1990's

Appearance: 5"6" with short, trimmed black hair that is greying around the edges. He has pale skin and rectangular glasses. He wears a grey pinstripe suit with a deep purple tie and shoes so shiny that his reflection is visible in them. He stands straight with a very formal posture.

Personality: He is a middle class man who is very businesslike an nature. He is very logical and clever, but not at all agile. He uses long words often and doesn't realise that sometimes his companions don't understand what he means. He is very lonely in this future.

Flaws: He overvalues intelligence and can often judge a book (or another character) by its cover. He is not at all physically fit, and slightly on the chubbby side (he used to smoke). he doesn't get along with his companions as well as they do with each other as he can be quick to dismiss things and jump to conclusions.

Abilities/Skills: He is very clever, particularly at maths and science. He also has a great knowledge of British history from 1500's to 1990's.

Motives: He first wants only to go home, but he then find out that his wife was a victim of the 9/11 bombings. Thinking of a way to save his wife and return home is his motive.

Past: He was born in 1953 in New York. At school he was a high achiver in science and maths. He went on to study Britich history and Computer science/Robotics at university. In 1993 his mother
died of lung cancer from smoking - at this point he quit smoking himself. He worked as a technician for IBM in new york.
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1st Place - Hit the Black by mikeypro
2nd Place - Makeshift Calamity by jcipriano1
3rd Place - Ashes and Blood by HaydenSmith

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yay... may I join? :D

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Name: Nala

Sex: Female

Age: 21

Time Period (Year): 2134

Appearance: petite, dark wavy hair, slender, black tight jeans and "I <3 NY" XL t-shirt with knitted cardigan over, comfy but stylish black military boots.

Personality: speaks her mind freely, laughs, overly emotional

Flaws: gets irritated and annoyed by people easily, selfish, overly emotional

Abilities/Skills: super sporty, is easily unnoticed when she wants to be, great at scheming

Motives: shall be thought about and posted later :D

Past: also shall be thought about…

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