Mommy, why are you so cold?

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I guess this poem's slightly long, but well, it's been forever since I've written something, and it might be a bit... off(?) So yeah, here goes! Also, this poem was inspired from the T.V. series Criminal Minds (Season 6) . This new season freaks me out. It should be like, 16+ or something -_-

Okay, anyways, enjoy!

Blue waters,
but mommy, no blue sky.
Such pretty flowers,
but mommy, why do they rest on you?

They are those nice police officers,
who read to me last night.
But mommy, tell me,
why do they take daddy away?

Mommy, I’m scared now,
you’re not replying to me.
But mommy, tell me,
what happened downstairs that night?

Mommy, get up!
This is no longer funny.
But mommy, I’m scared,
why are you lying in that hard, cold coffin?

Mommy, don’t you worry,
they’ve told it all to me.
I thought daddy was my hero,
but now I think otherwise.

Mommy, he sat in the corner,
and was laughing with his cell mates.
I heard your name,
and I couldn’t bear it no more.

But mommy, it’s all fine,
he is no longer alive.
I took care of him,
in the middle of the night.

Mommy tell me,
if he ever troubles you up there.
Then it shall be the end of me,
and hell begins again for him.

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Also, Happy Diwali and New Year, Everyone!

Awesome poetry! It looks like you suffered so much. This poem reminds of Eminem's lyrics. I loved the last two lines. This shows how much you love your mother.
Your poem is very emotional and good. You can give a musical effect to it by using alliterations and rhyming scheme. These were the main things about Alfred Lord Tennyson's poems. You can add last few lines telling how much you love your mommy.
The poem really impressed me!

Wow. You did a really...like REALLY good job with this poem. If this is what has happened to you in real life then Bless your Sould. I will be praying for you. But either way, you completely painted a picture in my head although the poem wasn't exactly descriptive. Which is completely fine because you did such an amazing job of telling a story through this poem that touched my heart. Keep up the good work.

oh my gosh. I love this idea, i thought that you repeating the mommy part, was very well used.

Wow, this really is quite deep and emotional. These kind of poems are definatley the hardest for me to read and I can understand the character's feeling quite well in this poem. This was a brilliant poem my favorite part of this poem has to to be

Blue waters but mommy, no blue sky

this was an absolutely great way to start off. I could see the image in my head, and the emotions went through my head. I really thought that this poem had a lot of feeling in it, and you I look forward to reading more of your work!