How to say the words left unsaid

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How do you say the words,
When you don’t want to listen to the truth?
Feeling sorry for yourself won’t bring your brother back.
Can’t you see what your doing to yourself,
What you doing to your family?
Your drinking to forget the painful memories.
But your not going to find your solution at the bottom of that bottle.
All your gonna find is lost hope.
Daddy,
Can’t you see that’s this scares me?
Can’t you see we all care about you?
You’ve pushed us so far away that,
We feel like we have to leave for you to get this through your head.
We only want your happiness.
Is this the way you want to go down?
Alone? Depressed? Hopeless?
The only person standing in your way is yourself.
There is still hope for you,
You just have to look right in front of you and see that us 3 girls still love you.
We just want to see you make an attempt to heal, to have a better life.
Not everything lasts forever,
Even though mommy may not love you anymore,
Doesn’t mean that you don’t still mean the world to her.
Give her some credit,
She has done an amazing job at being a mother and wife.
Daddy,
You are always in my prayers and thoughts.
And all you can give me now is to try.
Try to make a better life for yourself.
And know that poppi and your brother are looking down from heaven on you right now.
They want you to be happy.
And so do I.
No matter what happens,
Never give up hope.
Whenever one doors closes,
Another one opens.
Love,
Your daughter




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This is very touching, I can't see anything wrong but to space your stanzas.
Its' so very heartfelt, so much drama and love.
I've never seen such work, and lovely words or sensibility effort to put together.
Like I said just space the stanzas so the rest could know when one stanza is done and starts.
That is where I had a bit of trouble other than that, its perfect.
Keep up the good work.

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Wow. Such a great message. I have some suggestions, so here it goes:

How do I say the words,
When you don’t want to listen to the truth?
Feeling sorry for yourself won’t bring your brother back.
Can’t you see what your doing to yourself?
What you doing to your family?
You're drinking to forget the painful memories.
But you're not going to find your solution at the bottom of that bottle.
All you're gonna find is lost hope.
Daddy,
Can’t you see that’s this scares me?
Can’t you see we all care about you?
You’ve pushed us so far away that
We feel like we have to leave for you to get this through your head.
We only want your happiness.
Is this the way you want to go down?
Alone? Depressed? Hopeless?
The only person standing in your way is yourself.
There is still hope for you,
You just have to look right in front of you and see that your three girls still love you.
We just want to see you make an attempt to heal, to have a better life.
Not everything lasts forever,
Even though mommy may not love you anymore,
Doesn’t mean that you don’t still mean the world to her.
Give her some credit,
She has done an amazing job at being a mother and wife.
Daddy,
You are always in my prayers and thoughts.
And all you can give me now is to try.
Try to make a better life for yourself.
And know that Poppi and your brother are looking down from heaven on you right now.
They want you to be happy.
And so do I.
No matter what happens,
Never give up hope.
Whenever one doors closes,
Another one opens.
Love,
Your daughter


I really think the emotion is heartbreaking. Great job and never stop writing,
Life is not about how you sing in the sun, it is about how you dance in the rain.



The grand in the hotel rings with broken tunes; the guests frown; the concierge winces. But the blue-hatted boy is happy and braver than they.
— TheMythMaster