My Medicine

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Judith fed her soul to lions
But their jaws were glued with fear
All her attempts of trying
Would always disappear

She marched ahead alone and false
Marched towards the Gates of Lot
Towards the land of the Fragment Waltz
The land that rhyme begot

She rested on a weak toadstool
And smelled Redemption at her feet
The Temptation was fast and cruel
But the Victory was deathly sweet

Chorus
Who will buy my medicine?
Who will buy my medicine?
Who will buy my medicine?
Who will buy my mother’s sin?

She put the magic in her sack
And carried it with her into Lot
The world turned a misty, swirling black
And her thoughts began to rot

But she held onto the enchantment
The deliverance from her Exodus
One more day and she would repent
She must bring them The Dream of Gerontius

She crossed the threshold like a bridesmaid
Overwhelmed by her dismay
For all the salt in Lot was mislaid
Trampled underfoot in broad display

Chorus




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Love it

The chrous sounds irritating, but you can't tell til you've heard it right?
Oh the trees!
Take me back to London please!!!




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It's not bad; But the chorus seems kind of irritating as was stated before. I would suggest revising also... But keep up the work.
children...so easily amused




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Quite entertaining. The chorus does seem pretty annoying, but it depends on what kind of music genre it is. It reminds me of the Butthole Surfers (thats a compliment, by the way).
Gotta a find a woman be good to me,
Who won't hide my liquor, try to serve me tea.



You are beautiful because you let yourself feel, and that is a brave thing indeed.
— Shinji Moon