Willow Tree

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When I see a Willow tree it makes me think of this. Hope you all enjoy.

There the Willow stands
Across the stretching lands
Mossy green against the sky
They have a secret deep down inside
Silently they wish for more
Upon some Island, some distant shore
And so it weeps, and so it cries
Turning away from endless skies
Arching branches, just like wings
To fly away, to better things

I am completely speechless. I wish I could've written something like this, but I don't think I could have put it as perfectly as you did! I really liked it, though. That poem just sort of flowed. Like, so naturally it could've been a bunch of random letters and numbers that I would be able to understand any way. It is really short, though, but I like that about it. Short and sweet as they say. ^-^ Keep writing!

Hi there!
I very much enjoyed this poem!

Silently they wish for more
Upon some Island, some distant shore
And so it weeps, and so it cries

-This all reads very well, and I love, love, love how you describe the willow as weeping and crying! It's perfect phrasing, in my opinion.

Arching branches, just like wings
To fly away, to better things

-The way you've ended is hopeful. It leaves the reader with a sense of faith, you know? Anyway, great ending

The only nitpick is that you spelled 'secret' wrong. That's all, I think.

Overall it was amazingly written, and well worth the read.
Happy Writing
-Briggsy

I really should try writing poetry, then perhaps I would have a little more authority when it comes to reviewing it. But here I am, take it or leave it. This was decent, though not great, not yet.

Here are the edits I would make, though get a second opinion, because like I said, I'm no expert.

The Willow stands, there
Across stretching lands of
Mossy green against thegrey sky
They have a secrete deep down inside,
Silently, they wish for more
Upon some Island, some distant shore
And so it weeps,
(line break)and so it cries
Turning away from endless skies
Arching branches, just like wings
To fly away, to better things

Okay. It is nice, but it is too neat and safe I want you to branch out. Abadon the known, and delve into the enigmatic. The closing is just too cliche, too worn too common. It doesn't set the piece of like it could. I think it is just the line to better things It's like you forced it in there for the sake of rhyme rather than poetry.

Anyway I hope this all helps.

JP