We Remember

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Through the smoke and the rubble,
Shined some light.
All who experienced the awful day and night
Of nine eleven can understand,
We all were affected, but the time has come,
To let out your hand and think,
Whether you live in New York, a small town in Minnesota, or outside of the U.S.
We must understand, we were all affected.

We will remember,
The woman who received a call from her mother asking if she was okay,
She stood there frozen, unable to say, how hard it was to watch the buildings fall,
But that was nothing compared to watching people jumping, risking it all.

A baby cried and a mother cried to,
How will she explain to her daughter that her father didn’t fall from grace,
All he did was fall alongside of those towers;
Being one of many who were just trying to help other escape deaths face.

When a man’s hands shake as he dials the number of his partner, husband, and true love,
The phone isn’t off, he never hears the voicemail, it doesn’t even ring,
All he seems to hear are two beeps, telling him just one thing.
He has most likely lost the love of his life.

The little girl whose daddy calls her, attempting to explain what the bad people have done.
She’s not too far, but the state lines feel oceans away, as he attempts to say,
Holding back tears, that he must venture into the buildings that everyone now fears.

September eleventh will remain in the world’s heart.
The lives lost are not wasted,
The lives created will never replace those who have gone,
And the ones, who struggled but held on, are heroes as well,
Because at the end of the day,
Whether it be people, buildings, faith, security or hope that fell,
We will always remember.

Today is a day to cry, weep, and scream.
To throw a pillow or two, while the news pulls on the nations heart strings.
Yesterday was just a little too fast, but today has come, much like it has in the past.
Tomorrow will arrive, no different than most, except we will not mourn,
We will remember,
Through the fire and despair,
Our memories have prevailed.
When nothing goes right, go left




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Oh, wow. There was so much depth and feeling in this poem, it touched the reader. Nine Eleven was a horrible, horrible day. I do not live in the U.S. but I am human. It would take an inhuman person to say he felt nothing for 9/11.

Now, nitpicking :-
Your lines were a bit too big. For both, when it comes to reading, and when it comes to presenation. It was like:-

A really big line which sometimes didn't have commas, and when it did it still continued and it was so big,
and never-ending.

Now try reading the first sentence and then the second. Then, look at how it will look while presenting it.

Now, you try this:

Everytime you land a comma,
start a new line.
It will help even your lines,
and read it clearly.
Also it will,
look prettier!

^ Yes?

Also, I was told, that you do not need to start every sentence with a capital. NOTE: Only if the previous sentence ends in a comma, the next one doesn't need a capital. If the previous sentence ends in a fullstop, the next sentence must start with a capital.


If you ask me to choose a paragraph I liked the most, I would just quote your entire poem. I liked it that much! It deserves a "like"!

-TwistedMuffins!
If I were to have a super power, it would be to time-travel, so that I could turn back time, and erase your very existence.




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Wow, this poem is so deep. I felt like crying after reading it, seriously I did. I didn't though. I just sighed really loudly. I was a little unsure of reading this poem at first because it was so long and all and I was short for time, but once I started reading was completely hooked on.

The ending was amazing! The beginning drew me in quickly, which is great because every great poem does that. After that I got so into the poem I couldn't look for punctuation or grammatical mistakes so I am sorry but I didn't see any. My favourite verse has to be the last one:

snowberry23 wrote:Today is a day to cry, weep, and scream.
To throw a pillow or two... best line! I love it. But may you should start a new line here???, while the news pulls on the nations heart strings.
Yesterday was just a little too fast, but today has come, much like it has in the past.
Tomorrow will arrive, no different than most, except we will not mourn,
We will remember,
Through the fire and despair,
Our memories have prevailed.


I love the poem overall. Twisted Muffins was right, it deserves a 'like'
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