Secret Love

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My first try at poetry about three years ago! -__-

I see this boy, and he is so handsome
My love for him sprouts like a blossom

The way he looks at me makes me freeze
And I know that my love for him will increase

My love for him is pure true love
A love that really comes from above

If only he knew it isnt an obssession
But instead, it is a true emotion

I want him to love me as my first wish
And then all the rest will be accomplished

If only he knew I am his secret admirer
And that my love for him is really enitre...

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Not to sure if i should add something here...

Oh A SECRET LOVE!
That's what it's called!

aw,what a cute and loving poem.i liked how you expressed how you feel in such short verses and whst you wish happens. the rhyming from line to line was good,it then got towards the middle and it stopped,but the choice of words stepped in for it so great job:)

Aooow, This is soo cute! I think many people can relate too! It was written in a simple form with primary and secondary rhyming and even though all rhymes didn't seem to come naturally none of them seemed too forced either! Nice job!

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

Great work! I love the line to line rhyming! I also love the structure of the poem and the simplicity in it's nature! My only wish is that I can feel more desperation in the poem. This could be done by changing some of the words, primary in the second line of each stanza. To give it a little more punch! I am loving your work so far, you have a true talent!