Rainbows

I know that no one lives forever, but when you were taken from me that day, I knew that I'd never see rainbows the same way again. You were swallowed whole by the light, and I was left with only a cavern in my chest where our love once drifted. How could you part like that; how could you leave me knowing EXACTLY what happened? How could you tell me that I'll always have a gaping hole inside? I swear, you were wrong, and the emptiness that once swelled inside me is lessening more everyday. The problem is that it lessens for you only... Colorless, hopeless, my life was taken the same day you were. And that's how I remember you- leaving me with nothing, not even an escape. This is my letter for closure, and this will be turned gray as you have finished reading it.

*It's either 150 words or right below it, I'm pretty sure. If not, please tell me.*

It's a little bit too short, and it doesn't exactly explain much. I'm going to assume there's going to be a Chapter 2? It needs some explanation. Swallowed by light? When did this happen? How did he die? And what does she mean by exactly what happened? Anyhow, if you do make the next chapter, could you explain a little bit better?

So, I still am not sure what happened to the person you're talking to. Did he/she die? Or you mention love, was the narrarator someone who just got dumped? Anyway, I have a feeling you didn't want to give away many details, and you wanted your reader to be able to guess what happened. You wrote "how could you leave me knowing EXACTLY what happened" Yet your reader knows far from exactly what happened.
Also, the narrarator said "the emptiness that once swelled inside me is lessening more everyday" Yet directly after that he says the other person took his life away and left him with nothing. So, is he recovering or not? This left me with a lot of questions, and I know that since it's so short it isn't going to answer everything, but still, it didn't have quite enough information to satisfy me. Still, your words flowed smoothly and all the diction was great. Maybe just find a way to explain a little more.

Harro, TwinSeed. ^-^
(There are 147 words written to this poem.)
First off, I love this line:

I know that no one lives forever, but when you were taken from me that day, I knew that I'd never see rainbows the same way again

Purely epic ^-^
I thought it was pretty. I would think of formatting it a little differently, though. Like, rather than having the whole story without spacing down, I would probably think of dropping each part down line by line.
(If I explained that weird, look at my poem “Delusion”, and that will give you an idea of what I mean by dropping down. Lol I’m not sure what to call it.)
I would smooth it out a little on the rough edges, but I thought it was nice. ^-^
Keep it up,
Charade--- <3

To Everyone: Yeah, this left me with plenty of questions also. I have no clue what happened to either one of them, I just wrote it. Thank you all for reviewing this

Hey Twinseed,

147 words, and everyone of them interesting!

I have a suggestions, try splitting it into two paragraphs. It was a bit confusing, and maybe I just didn't get it all. I do think you need to make more of an emphasis on rainbows since thats the name. Try putting it in letter form, that would be cool! Anyway I really liked it. Nicely done!

PM me or post on my wall if you have any questions!

-Boo