The Lamb and the Lion

And so it begins.
The lamb has lain down with the lion,
and hath been devoured.
From its dark sunders,
the beast is woken;
and the shadows forgotten alight;
and into the darkness unending are plunged.
This, the nature of the beast.

This isn't long but it says a lot! When I read the title I expected a twist with love, but I like what you did by making it how nature is. I'm a little sad for that poor lamb, they're one of my favorite animals next to pigs. I have a question I'd like to ask regarding a few lines. They are:

"and the shadows forgotten alight;
and into the darkness unending are plunged."

what exactly does that mean? It sounds deep and all, but I'm just not exactly sure what it means, forgive my ignorance.

Other than that, I have no major critism, I liked it!

Grandison

Ignatius5453 wrote:And so it begins.

The lamb has lain down with the lion,
and hath been devoured.
From its dark sunders,
the beast is woken;
and the shadows forgotten alight;
and into the darkness unending are plunged.
This, the nature of the beast.

It's good! Although, you should've made it longer. Blah, this is a lame review. So sorry~

Good job. Keep writing.
-
Ariel<3'

Wow, I loved it.

I think you should leave this as it is.

There is ingenuity in simplicity with this piece of work, and it says all you need to say without rambling on.

Well done!

Woah! I was expecting a totally different poem from reading the title. And I had to read the poem twice because it was awesome, and completely unexpected. There were a couple of places that seemed like they were worded strangely, but then I thought about it and I like it just how it is. Sorry that this was such an unhelpful review, but still... I had to say something!

Woaah! THIS IS AWEGREAT! So simple, yet so complicated... I loved it, so powerful and amazing.
Every line seems to have been carefully, and throughtfully written and well, AMAZING! The only thing that wasn't something to hurray for about this was the flow... I feel, because the lines differ in length so much it's hard to find the rythm since there is no pattern in how you've built this text. This is though, just a tiny nitpick because overall this was just... AMAZING... did I say amazing? AMAZING!

4½/5 icky spiders to you!

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

Wow. This was fantastic. Short and simple, but it had a lot of meaning. Sorry this is such a short review. Meh whatever haha anyways I loved this poem and you REALLY need to keep writing!!!!!

Love, fruity!