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lele253isme
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Tue Jul 26, 2011 12:44 am
lele253isme says... · Tue Jul 26, 2011 12:44 am
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DrunkOnWriting
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Tue Jul 26, 2011 12:53 am
DrunkOnWriting says... · Tue Jul 26, 2011 12:53 am
Beautiful, powerful lyrics, saturated with emotion. I really loved this!

Grey clouds, move away now
Clear skies, peace at mind
No regrets, no forgets


my favorite part :) It was pure poetry. Unfortunately, I can't really find much wrong here :)
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VuzzyCat
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Tue Jul 26, 2011 5:58 am
VuzzyCat says... · Tue Jul 26, 2011 5:58 am
This is a really good poem! I love the message it sends. And I didn't see anything wrong with it. Good job! My favorite part was the entire last verse. It seemed to flow so smoothly. I love it!!! Keep writing!

No more
Hiding away
No more
Changing me
no more
having fear
No more
No more
No more
Tears
I'm the author of my own life. Unfortunately I'm writing in pen. Mistakes I make can not be erased, the only option is to turn the page and start a new chapter. <3

I'm single because God is busy writing the best love story.
<3 VuzzyCat
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LiesOnLies
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Sat Jul 30, 2011 7:13 pm
LiesOnLies says... · Sat Jul 30, 2011 7:13 pm
This was pretty well written, but I kind of would like to know why the person has all of these emotions. It's really vague as to why this person feels this way. Perhaps, I missed something, but it just seems that someone is randomly saying they will not hideaway again...but from what?
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