I don't know!

Laying on my soft settling bed,
relaxing every bone in my body.
Nothing springs to mind what i'm going to do today..
but why is that such a bad thing?

I have this thought
that life is so great why am I wasting it?
but what the hell can I do..
I don't want to do anything which confuses me.

Going out just makes me want to go home even more,
so why go out in the first place?
All this pressure that I must do something with my life
but I just want time to stop!

Change is what really scares me.
Moving schools,
making new friends..
I have had too much in my life!
stepping out that door makes me
feel like it's happening all over again..

Maybe me going out is a symbol of change?
I have these weird ways of making things which it isn't,
but why would I think of that when it's not?
it has to mean something..

Another day goes by and i'm still at home.
Time going by but all I want to do is stop.
I guess what I am trying to say is
life right now for me isn't the greatest
but life ahead of me is what's keeping me going.


To be honest I have no clue if people know what I'm talking about. If you read my regular poems etc. they usually rhyme so i wanted to randomly make this. But if you do understand what I am talking about please try and interpret this into your words and i'll see if you got it right...

this is an awsome poem

Hey! My name is Sunshine and I'll be your reviewer today! I think I'll get the nit-picky stuff out of the way and then I'll move on to my overall opinion, ok? Opinion in... beautiful blue!

Laying on my soft settled bed,
relaxing every bone in my body.
Nothing springs to mind what I'm going to do today..
but why is that such a bad thing?

I have this thought
that life is so great >Indents<
sowhy am I wasting it?
but what the hell can I do..I feel like the 'but' interupts the flow.
I don't want to do anything which confuses me.

Going out just makes me want to go home even more,
so why go out in the first place?
All this pressure that I must do something with my life
but I just want time to stop!

Change is what really scares me.
Moving schools,
making new friends..
I have had too much in my life!Wrong 'too'! The too you used means also. The one you want is t-o.
stepping out that door makes me
feel like it's happening all over again..

Maybe me going out is a symbol of change?
I have these weird ways of making things which it isn't,
but why would I think of that when it's not?
it has to mean something..

Another day goes by and I'm still at home.
Time going by>Click enter key here< but all I want to do is stop.
I guess what I am trying to say is
life right now for me isn't the greatest
but life ahead of me is what's keeping me going.

~Overall~

I feel like this poem is kinda about someone who has had so much change in their life, but only wants things to remain simple and in the past. They may be afraid of change, prehaps even feels a little depressed, but the plans of the future are like a light at the end of the tunnel. As of the poem, I do enjoy the concept. It is easily relatable andwell thought through. The poem itself feels more like it could be turned into a personal narriative with a little more background. It's good that you strayed a little away from rhymy poems, though! Also, I think you puncuated a liitle to much. Poetry is a free flow style of writing, which means to much puncuation can screw it up a little. That's just my opinion, but since it's poetry you can choose if you'd rather keep it the way you have it! Lastly, try to capitalize everything that needs to be capitalized. Honestly, it's simple to fix but bugs a lot of reviewers! Thank you and keep writing!

P.S. If you think I did a good job please contact me and tell me how I did!!!!

Thank you for that review, I'll try and work more on my punctuation etc. You did get the point I was trying to make so well done

But this is fire! It really speaks to me... Superb.. I'm feeling it!!!

Cute avatar:)
Laying on my soft settling bed,you could omit this word, flows better without it
relaxing every bone in my body.
Nothing springs to mind about/ What am I going to do todaywhat i'm going to do today..but why is that such a bad thing?
I have this thought
that life is so great why am I wasting it?
but what the hell can I do..I don't want to do anything which confuses me.THE SENTENCE SEEMS TO TRY TO EMPHASIZE ON DEEP EMOTION WHICH FOR SOME REASON CAN'T BE VERY CLEARLY FELT BY the reader, sorry my caps lock was on:)
Going out just makes me want to go home even more,so why go out in the first place?The sentence is very conversational, you could change the format or sth to make it sound more..poetic
All this pressure that I must do something with my life
but I just want time to stop!Oh yes I know this feeling, very well. Like this statement
Change is what really scares me.
Moving schools, making new friends..I have had too much in my life!
stepping out that door makes me feel like it's happening all over again.. This was very well written, liked it a lot.

English doesn't seem to flow very well for you sometimes, Highlight on the sometimes, k? No hard feelings.
But poetry does come natural to you, so continue, practice and I'm certain we'll be seeing a future poet here:) Hope my review helps.