Save My Soul

Save my soul
O, You charmed boy
Tell me what you see,
When you look though me,
Tell me the truth, dont lie about it
Cause you're the only one to inspire me to fly and break free.

N/A: I know it does not rhymes but i wasn't really trying to make it rhyme.
~ NiiNii

Short and simple, maybe could use a little more description and detail to convey the tellers emotions more, but nicely done for the length of it. The only grammar error I found was...

[quote] When you look threw me,[/quote}

I think 'threw' should be 'through'.

I think this need a little more originality, something to set it apart as a unique piece of poetry but a nice start. It's style is easy-to-follow and the format seems to be consistent enough. Good job!

<..> Kat

Hello!

There's some grammatical errors here that stands out quite a bit for me.

NightStormxd wrote:Save my soul
O, you charmed boy
Tell me what you see,
When you look through me,
Tell me the truth, don't lie about it
Cause you're the only one to inspire me to fly and break free.

I definitely think that this poem could be extended it seemed a bit short to me. For one, there's none emotion in it and there's very little description. I would recommend adding those two elements in as I think they would improve the poem. The poem also flowed really well.

Other than that, I don't think there's much for me to comment on as the poem itself was quite short. Keep writing!

like the others have said, you have some slight grammer errors, but other than that this poem was amazing! i loved it!