The Great Wall Of China

The Great Wall of China

There it stands, meandering,
Across the emerald green,
From the East, towards the west,
On the tops of rolling jade,
Hills that shine like diamonds in
The early morning wind.

My feet beat the uneven ground,
Like many have before me,
Clutching at the crumbling rock
Which ivy clings to like a saviour,
I see the frozen guards that stand,
Unseeing, unblinking, unmoving.

The further I travel, the more I see,
The luscious red and brown herbs,
That coat, the landscape
Like a skin, that moves
In the rustling wind, alive,
Ready to share their secrets with me.

My breath ragged in my throat,
The stone turrets mocking,
Calling, offering shade,
And peace, and quiet.
But soon, I will reach the top.
The top of The Great Wall of China.

There it stands, meandering,Across the emerald green,From the East, towards the west,On the tops of rolling jade,Hills that shine like diamonds in, The early morning wind.My feet beat the uneven ground,Like many have before me,Clutching at the crumbling rockWhich ivy clings to like a saviour,I see the frozen guards that stand,Unseeing, unblinking, unmoving.The further I travel, the more I see,The luscious red and brown herbs,That coat, the landscape Like a skin, that movesIn the rustling wind, alive, Ready to share their secrets with me.My breath ragged in my throat,The stone turrets mocking,Calling, offering shade,And peace, and quiet. But soon, I will reach the top.The top of The Great Wall of China.

I like it a lot.

Another good one! Though Haunting is better, in my humble opinion. Only one thing I saw: after you say "hills that shine like diamonds in" you should delete the comma. It will make it flow better for the reader. Anyway, awesome job. I love this one too!

Ahhhh! I se what you mean! I shall see to it that it is perfected. Mwahaha.
To be or not to be [a coma], that is the question. xD
Sorry, random mood!

Oh, but hold your horses ... erm ... sharks, Tiger Shark, there is no coma where you said there is a coma :O! My oh my, it's a miracle! xD