Things that go boom

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Hey guys, Apple here.

I'm writing a story about planes and when they get shot out of the sky well they kind of go boom. But I'm sick of writing "the ship exploded into a cloud of flame," so I was wondering does anyone else have some kind of synonym that could help? Now I'm probably asking the impossible because I bet ten dollars most people don't understand a word I'm saying but if you have some adjectives or nouns that could explain: the ship exploded into a cloud of flame, then it would be extremely helpful.

Thank you in advance. :D
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The sky was littered with ash as pieces of the plane flew this way and that

the sky became a hue of bright orange and then black as the plane was demolished by the flames

a cloud of ash exploded in the sky above, sending pieces of the plane raining down on the ground below

a sudden burst of flames blew the plane to pieces

Something like this might work, maybe a combination of some of these. If you need more, tell me just a bit more about what you are writing, and I will see if I can help.

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Thank you so much, that's exactly what I was looking for. :D
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Glad I could help! (: Feel free to PM me anytime if you need anything else.

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There's also "the plane blew apart/disintegrated into pieces of flaming shrapnel".

Another possible route would be to describe the explosion indirectly. Stuff like, "Where once flew an enemy plane drifted fragments of wood and steel tangled in flame" would work just as well, and would definitely make things more interesting.
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Ooo shrapnel, that's a good one. Yeah, I think I'll do that one, thank you! :D
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Have them talking to the pilot, and have the radio go dead(in a really suspenseful way)
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Pundit has a good one.
Or you could go with something like: "There was a thunderclap, and the sky was filled with falling shards of (depends on the era)"
Actually... Pundit's was better.
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No your idea was helpful also, trust me. Thank you everyone for giving me suggestions, already I find it easier to write and when I re-read it, I found it a lot more interesting. Thanks, again. :D
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