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the worlds a pool of wonder,
as you look fourth and yonder
you see a star of hope,
and that is how we cope.
Last edited by Poetriez on Sun Apr 02, 2006 12:02 am, edited 1 time in total.
War is war
Nothing else
Nothing more

-J.G. Follett




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LoL u've got Nate's avatar.

the poem is short and sweet.(infact very short)

The rhyming is good. :)
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coupe
Should be cope?

A Nice short poem, with a nice rhyme scheme.
Real poetry are those with the best words in the best order

~~~~~~~~Mandy~~~~~~~~~




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Expand on this. It's too short to provide a proper critique to this - each line is also sort of disjointed from the next.

coupe

cope

start using punctuation. please =/
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yeah i didn't notice i wrote coupe which is also a word ha ha an yeah i could probably expand it i put in punctuation
War is war
Nothing else
Nothing more

-J.G. Follett



Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.
— Enid Bagnold