Human

I really liked this, I liked it's simplicity as well as its obscure structure. You definitely have a few great moments in here. My favorites were "of blood and bones and hopes and dreams" and "impossibly kinetic."
Some of my only comments on this piece include the suggestion of punctuation. I was a little confused in parts of this poem as to where certain ideas start and stop. I think the addition of punctuation could help that a bit. However, I also enjoy the lack of it because it has a 'stream of consciousness' kind of feel to it. It's your call really, but I thought I'd add my commentary.
Also, I think you could afford to employ a few better word choices. Some really colorful, emotive adjectives that give such a short piece a bit more of a special quality and a better flow.
Okay, I hope this helped, or at least I hope you understand what I'm trying to say.
Love,
Jade.

This was great! It reminds me of a writer one of my friends likes, she writes like this and its always amazing. Just like that writer this was amazing, you got the feel of it and you just described it all yet somehow you did more. How you worded it was perfect made it have so much many, maybe more than you had thought. Very good!

Quick review:

Love this. Like the way it looks, love what's inside of it. It's short but sweet, very nice.

Thank you guys!
I'll definitely think about the punctuation and some of the words.