A dreame

A dream
Slavery was dismissed for the best of all
unwanted was wanted once more
destiny in life, destiny of me
i got the thing i needed to be
i got what i wished on a dream for myself
a dream where people are together
no blacks no whites no defined rights
every one together
a dream of a place where we all hold hands
together we walk by our own chance
of being free
i had a dream
a dream where people are together.

Hey Secret!

First I'll just say welcome to YWS seeings as you are quite new here

Anyway onto your poem. I liked it especially this line:

a dream of a place where we all hold hands

I love this line because it's often what I dream about, a world where everyone gets along happily. But anyway, there were places in the poem where I wasn't sure what you meant particularly in the first part of the poem. I think you could be clearer in the way you put across what you are trying to say especially because you don't have a rhyme scheme or regular rhythm to restrict you

You could also make it clearer by adding punctuation. Although it's a poem punctuation is needed so that the reader knows where to breathe Otherwise we think that we have to read it with no pauses! Pauses can also be used for dramatic effect

I loved the ideas behing your poem though It reminded me of John Lennons song imagine You could also expand if you wanted to on these ideas because there is a lot of scope for imagination on this kind of topic.

Oh and I noticed a little typo in the title you put

a dreame

Anyway overall I thought you did a good job and I enjoyed reading so thank you
Keep Writing,
Lydia

YOU NEED PUNCTUATION!!!!! AND CAPITALIZATION!!!! Just because it's a poem, doesn't mean it doesn't need either of those. Sorry for the rant, now, the poem was all bad. It just lacked those two key things, your wording was decent and the idea behind it was solid, jut do a little maintenance and you'll be fine. Keep Writing!

i like the story behind the poem

'where people are together
no blacks no whites no defined rights
every one together'
... You are a typo freak, and I am the hated semi-perfectionist editor who sometimes types for you ...
'we walk by our own chance
of being free
i had a dream'
... *Sigh* It was nothing but a dream ...
Correct 'Dreame'
Add punctuation and capitalization
Bhaow!!