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(Just a little something I wrote a second ago... I thought of the first three lines earlier and wanted to write a poem. I haven't posted anything on here in a while.
Ummm, please don't say anything about the punctuation and stuff. It's supposed to be that way.)


I’ve fallen
in love with these barrier strings
that callous my finger-
tips into the blackened wood,
tips me into sounds,
tips me to tropism.

Who-?
And the layered,compressed,strung-tight
hairs sound off like the
siren of the location, where I am
to find them, and answer,

“I am who.”

In adoration,
I hold it in my hand.
As a token of my immense relief,gratitude,
I brush cheeks with it, feel
its skin quiver with hums
and murmurs of promises.

In climax,
the faraway digits on hand, with fingertips,
are drawn down by gravity,
by a race, and in the pocket,
we are in the height, and one in silence,
one aloud, we. harmonize.
The greatest thing you'll ever learn is just to love and be loved in return.

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Whoo! You have a great poem here. I didn't understand some of it, but my general impression was that you are playing a violin or other stringed instrument. Excellent imagery. I liked the effect of the punctuation. Niiiice.
Shakespearian tongue-twister:

To sit in solemn silence
In a dark, dank dock
In a pestilential prison
With a lifelong lock;
Awaiting the sensation
Of a short, sharp shock
Of a cheap, chippy chopper
On a big black block.




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Very good. Even if the punctuation hadn't been meant to be like that, I wouldn't have said anything, it just complements the poem so well, I liked it a lot. Good Job! Keep Writing!
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I just thought I'd tell you that this is totally incredible! I love your writing style and the langauge you have used is exceptionally good. Keep writing no matter what!
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Hi there... So it was a good thing you didn't add a rhyme scheme... I'll be honest in saying that I didn't understand parts of the poem. But what I understood proved it to be good enough... So I'll say..had I been a less dumb person (like the two reviewers before me) I would have loved it!!
Harshita:)
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